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If only you were soulless.
If you were mindless, blind,
you and I could make a beautiful disaster.
The press would write of our brief affair;
they'd paint me (the woman in red) as pathetic.
They will not consider how I need your love
or how it pains me so deeply to throw myself at you.
I will not be remembered as a poet warrior.
I'll be the eternal survivor no more.
All who think of me will shake their bowed heads
and tearfully remark;
 If only you were soulless.
 If you were mindless, blind,
 You wouldn't have been such a bloody disaster.
I wonder what you think this poem is about.
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LookinAtStufff Featured By Owner Jul 14, 2013
Beautiful is they only word for it.
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Talia-WolfFang Featured By Owner Apr 14, 2013
This was a fantastic read, just like all of your other works. At first, I thought it was about losing yourself to the world, with the 40810 being some kind of bar code number - with people just being numbers, lost in a world of 7 billion. And that the death of one human, from some kind of insane lover, while being covered by the press for a brief moment, would be easily forgotten. (The press would write about our brief affair)

That people would not remember them for what they did, who they were, but remember them as the one lost in an accident. (they'd paint me (the woman in red) as pathetic. They will not consider how I need your love or how it pains me so deeply to throw myself at you. I will not be remembered as a poet warrior. I'll be the eternal survivor no more.)

And maybe the murderer planned to kill himself afterwards, but couldn't and now he faces the guilt and a far worse fate? (if only you were soulless, mindless, blind)
Even though a lot of the lines didn't match up with this after i re-read it. :XD:

aaaaand of course i couldn't resist the temptation to peek down and see what other people thought :P Whoops, seems like my interpretation was way off. Throw myself at you was a great play on words, bloody disaster as well.
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BloodshotInk Featured By Owner Apr 18, 2013
I'm late responding because April hates me, I apologise :[

Nods, what a complex idea, I love it. I love that people can take something so uniquely different from a reading.
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moontiger5 Featured By Owner Apr 1, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Despair, and yearning for a quick end, and above all for those seconds of mad rush just before tis all over. Enthralling.
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KuraiTenshiV Featured By Owner Mar 17, 2013  Hobbyist
reflections....
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BloodshotInk Featured By Owner Mar 22, 2013
:tighthug: trains.
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KuraiTenshiV Featured By Owner Mar 22, 2013  Hobbyist
cool
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donutmonk Featured By Owner Mar 16, 2013
You wonder what I think of it. I think it'd be too obvious to be a love poem. So I'm betting it's about the fear of being forgotten? o 3o Fear as to how you'll be viewed, that sort.
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BloodshotInk Featured By Owner Mar 22, 2013
For me, the poem is about a train. 40810 was written on the side of it.
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donutmonk Featured By Owner Mar 26, 2013
Well I was wrong. XD Ah well, worth a shot anyways. = w=
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