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I lie awake, staring at the cornices.
3AM: my fingers worry at the corners of my sheet.
My anxiety worries at the corners of my rib.
I bite and tug and huff out my misery
As the silence keeps me awake.
I lay with pressure of your absence
Pressing down over my nose and mouth.
A soft asphixiation of the heart, of the sanity.
It is a hot grey night in London.

You are awake, startled by the sunlight.
7AM: you can't lift your weighty skull from the sheet.
The day sirens, but you stay, settled,
Under the weight of your shroud, your loss,
Only the silence keeps you awake.
Unknowingly, for the first time in weeks
We are unintentionally in sync;
Laid out in funerial colours as we die.
It is a dull blue day in Dubai.
Was playing with the idea that two people, after a break up, in diffferent time zones.. One laying awake at night and one laying awake before getting up.. Might suddenly by accident spend a moment utterly in sync. United by their misery at losing the other, and they would never know it.
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LadyMortimus Featured By Owner Feb 18, 2013  Student General Artist
Wow, left me breathless :)
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BloodshotInk Featured By Owner Feb 19, 2013
Gosh :blush: Thank you!
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color-sekai Featured By Owner Feb 7, 2013  Student Digital Artist
im sorry if i am spamming you with comments, but, this is really well-written. the concept is so beautiful and the way you wrote it is so.. true. i can really imagine it happening.
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BloodshotInk Featured By Owner Feb 8, 2013
Don't be sorry, I like comments! thank you so much!!
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color-sekai Featured By Owner Feb 8, 2013  Student Digital Artist
hehe alright! xD you're welcome~!
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WinterLeave Featured By Owner Feb 5, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
very well written <3
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BloodshotInk Featured By Owner Feb 8, 2013
Thank you so much Winter. I try! :d
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WinterLeave Featured By Owner Feb 9, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
you're welcome!
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FoxofEbony Featured By Owner Feb 4, 2013
I love the idea behind your words it's beautiful :D
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BloodshotInk Featured By Owner Feb 8, 2013
Gosh thank you Foxie! :D
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FoxofEbony Featured By Owner Feb 8, 2013
you're welcome :hug:
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The-Ghost-Dancers Featured By Owner Feb 4, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
This is an interesting concept and you've written it so well. It's sad and touches my heart as I've recently been through a break up, and this brings perhaps a new light/or thought, to my sleepless nights.
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BloodshotInk Featured By Owner Feb 8, 2013
Thank you so much... and yeah... I am going through a break up myself so... I hope youre okay <3
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The-Ghost-Dancers Featured By Owner Feb 10, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I'm doing okay now thank you. I hope you are too <3
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Kazul9 Featured By Owner Feb 4, 2013   Writer
Wow, this is so beautiful! I love the idea of the two different timezones and for that one moment they're more together and more apart than before. Just, well, really amazing. Your writing style is gorgeous. :)
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BloodshotInk Featured By Owner Feb 8, 2013
Nods, it was a great idea, but sadly, he has moved on. In all timezones.

Thank you so much!
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Kazul9 Featured By Owner Feb 9, 2013   Writer
Ah, well. v_v I suppose that makes the beauty of the one moment all that more powerful, though.

You're welcome! ^^
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Saidye Featured By Owner Feb 4, 2013  Student General Artist
This is amazing. I love the idea I could even see this expanding into a sort of series of poetry based on these two. Lovely!
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BloodshotInk Featured By Owner Feb 8, 2013
Maybe. Sadly this story didn't end well.
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Saidye Featured By Owner Feb 10, 2013  Student General Artist
:(
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Narcaholic Featured By Owner Feb 3, 2013  Student
Creative theme (:
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BloodshotInk Featured By Owner Feb 8, 2013
Thanks! :D
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theGman0 Featured By Owner Feb 3, 2013  Hobbyist
wow, well written.
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BloodshotInk Featured By Owner Feb 8, 2013
Gosh, thanks :D I try!
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VertigoArt Featured By Owner Feb 3, 2013  Professional Writer
Very interesting piece. Good write
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BloodshotInk Featured By Owner Feb 8, 2013
Thank you! That means a lot!
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Zevais Featured By Owner Feb 3, 2013  Hobbyist
This waking sleep-unable to escape what I see...
I don't know how long my feet have been moving.
The rage burns and pounds at my heart.
I can taste the burn as I breathe in.
The screaming voices tell me stay asleep.
I know I am next to her but can't reach her.
I tear apart everything in front of me.
Swift annihilation, the purest insanity...
It is bitter in the dry desert of Hypnos.

She's also asleep, my light does not reach her.
It has been forever, and I don't have much left inside.
The dream scream, I need out, chaotic...
Even when weight is lifted, I see no way to win.
Oh, what I'd give for opened eyes and silence.
I know, because this always happens.
We lay down intentionally, and I am lost.
I crawl up to the surface of this dream every night.
I'm imprisoned by the nightsky of Somnus.
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BloodshotInk Featured By Owner Feb 8, 2013
It hurts to read :[ but I know its beautiful
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singagainsoon Featured By Owner Feb 3, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Gorgeous, as always. I live the idea, and the words you used really allowed me to be able to picture it happening.

Keep up the great work! :D
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BloodshotInk Featured By Owner Feb 8, 2013
:D Yay, I'm so glad you enjoyed this! Thank you for commenting :D
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singagainsoon Featured By Owner Feb 8, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
You're welcome :D it was a pleasure to read!
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singagainsoon Featured By Owner Feb 3, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
*love
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KuraiTenshiV Featured By Owner Feb 3, 2013  Hobbyist
It is very beautiful. and makes me sad and wonder...
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BloodshotInk Featured By Owner Feb 8, 2013
Makes me sad too :[
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KuraiTenshiV Featured By Owner Feb 10, 2013  Hobbyist
:hug:
no be sad =)
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