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I lie awake, staring at the cornices.
3AM: my fingers worry at the corners of my sheet.
My anxiety worries at the corners of my rib.
I bite and tug and huff out my misery
As the silence keeps me awake.
I lay with pressure of your absence
Pressing down over my nose and mouth.
A soft asphixiation of the heart, of the sanity.
It is a hot grey night in London.

You are awake, startled by the sunlight.
7AM: you can't lift your weighty skull from the sheet.
The day sirens, but you stay, settled,
Under the weight of your shroud, your loss,
Only the silence keeps you awake.
Unknowingly, for the first time in weeks
We are unintentionally in sync;
Laid out in funerial colours as we die.
It is a dull blue day in Dubai.
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A chance secondby BloodshotInk

Literature / Poetry / Emotional / Free Verse©2013-2014 BloodshotInk
Was playing with the idea that two people, after a break up, in diffferent time zones.. One laying awake at night and one laying awake before getting up.. Might suddenly by accident spend a moment utterly in sync. United by their misery at losing the other, and they would never know it.
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LadyMortimus Featured By Owner Feb 18, 2013  Student General Artist
Wow, left me breathless :)
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BloodshotInk Featured By Owner Feb 19, 2013
Gosh :blush: Thank you!
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color-sekai Featured By Owner Feb 7, 2013  Student Digital Artist
im sorry if i am spamming you with comments, but, this is really well-written. the concept is so beautiful and the way you wrote it is so.. true. i can really imagine it happening.
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BloodshotInk Featured By Owner Feb 8, 2013
Don't be sorry, I like comments! thank you so much!!
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color-sekai Featured By Owner Feb 8, 2013  Student Digital Artist
hehe alright! xD you're welcome~!
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WinterLeave Featured By Owner Feb 5, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
very well written <3
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BloodshotInk Featured By Owner Feb 8, 2013
Thank you so much Winter. I try! :d
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WinterLeave Featured By Owner Feb 9, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
you're welcome!
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FoxofEbony Featured By Owner Feb 4, 2013
I love the idea behind your words it's beautiful :D
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BloodshotInk Featured By Owner Feb 8, 2013
Gosh thank you Foxie! :D
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