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It follows me.
My silver skeined ghost.

An almost imperceptible thread;
only visible when you shine light
    directly upon it.
It follows me.

It rides the underground.
It hides under bridges,
Under trains.
It is woven into the spools of tar
         that form the roads between.

Inevitably if I walk too fast
it reminds me -
Like the tug of stitches in your cheek
that reminds you; you have lost your wisdom.
It reminds me.

It trips me in doorways,
when my mind is elsewhere.
If I look away from it -
           - it slips round my neck.
Another knot to throw over the beams
it mauls me without a fair chance.

I tried to sever it. I can't.
Only the corrosion of time has a chance.
So for now, I am tethered
to the fragment of my heart
that I tore out for you.

Although we have placed it in a shroud
and declared it dead,
the umbilical thrumming keeps me awake.
It does not desist;
the connection to that unwanted slab of meat.

It follows me,
to tangle me up. To haunt me.
It follows me.
and I wrote this after.


(skeined, like a skein of fabric or thread)
(lost wisdom, / wisdom teeth / realising you've made a total freaking fool out of yourself and that you look fucking ridiculous. again.)
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lizziestardust Featured By Owner Feb 11, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
so beautifully written :heart:
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BloodshotInk Featured By Owner Feb 15, 2013
:D Gosh thank you lizzie!
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Kazul9 Featured By Owner Feb 9, 2013   Writer
Gorgeous. It has an ache that feels like it's ghosting around the inside of my head, even after I've read it.
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BloodshotInk Featured By Owner Feb 15, 2013
Nods, thats how it feels
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Svartulf Featured By Owner Feb 8, 2013   General Artist
Thank you for sharing your word craft. :)
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PuzzledHeartBox Featured By Owner Feb 7, 2013
Magnificent work, it has a haunting appeal to it.
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BloodshotInk Featured By Owner Feb 8, 2013
Thank you, thats what I was hoping for
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0hgravity Featured By Owner Feb 7, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
I think what impresses me most about your writing is the way you convey feeling. You convey it so subtly well that I can't help feel whatever it is you're writing about. Even though I probably only feel a fraction of what is poured into the piece, it is still amazingly potent.

This piece is no exception.
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BloodshotInk Featured By Owner Feb 8, 2013
Thank you... you are just so sweet. (I am still feeling bad for ranting the other day). I really appreciate you
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0hgravity Featured By Owner Feb 8, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
you're welcome (I wish you wouldn't - I really liked that you were honest with me).
ah, thanks :D
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