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Tonight's sky is a fiber-optic forest
for us to lose our minds in,
for hopes to become the cloudscape
and for dancing to become the norm.

Tonight's moon is a promise made
to us to keep our dreams within,
for us to build a starlit staircase
and unlock that gilded cage.

Tonight's dusk is a champagne toast
for us to drown our sorrows in
and the reminder that tomorrow
our lives go supernovicly astray.
Another word for my O'Driscoll Dictionary. Today we have supernovicly!

♥ Kathryn O'Driscoll © 2013

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Your choice of words was well used. It makes the reader imagine themselves in the situation that you want to them to see and feel.
The emotions in the poem are very deep. It's well written and the words can captivate the reader's soul.
I can even imagine a setting in the dark candle-lit forest, with two faces illuminated. Their hands intertwined, they make a toast with the stars as their witnesses to the dreams that they want to achieve.
It is a touching and loving poem. You did well and I hope that I did a well written critique of this work.
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ValaSedai Featured By Owner Aug 21, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
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BloodshotInk Featured By Owner Aug 21, 2013
:love: Thank you!!
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exquisiteoath Featured By Owner Jul 26, 2013  Student General Artist
This is full of fantastic images.
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BloodshotInk Featured By Owner Jul 30, 2013
Thank you :))
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exquisiteoath Featured By Owner Jul 30, 2013  Student General Artist
You are most welcome
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BlueStanza Featured By Owner Jul 12, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I was drawn by your imagery. Lovely job.
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BloodshotInk Featured By Owner Jul 12, 2013
Yay! Thanks :D
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lupus-astra Featured By Owner Jul 11, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
This is just so beautiful.
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BloodshotInk Featured By Owner Jul 12, 2013
d'aww :love:
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Walimaut Featured By Owner Jul 10, 2013
This one is special! Keep at it! :)
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BloodshotInk Featured By Owner Jul 12, 2013
I'll try! :D Thanks!
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ToaTepsak Featured By Owner Jul 10, 2013  Student Traditional Artist
Short and elegant :)
I like the parts about "dancing becoming the norm" and "lives going supernovicly astray". It may be made up but that's a powerful word there. I like it...
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BloodshotInk Featured By Owner Jul 12, 2013
Grins, thank you! I like that word too :>
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Rasphelion Featured By Owner Jul 9, 2013
Well done. Fiber-optic forests is a brilliant image.
also,

"Tonight's dusk is a champagne toast
for us to drown our sorrows in
and the reminder that tomorrow
our lives go supernovicly astray."

a delectably delicious end.
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BloodshotInk Featured By Owner Jul 12, 2013
Gosh, thank you! I am so happy you liked this!
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Rasphelion Featured By Owner Jul 14, 2013
haha It is my pleasure =)
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WinterLeave Featured By Owner Jul 9, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
beautiful!
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BloodshotInk Featured By Owner Jul 12, 2013
:D Thank you!!
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WinterLeave Featured By Owner Jul 13, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
you're welcome!
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lombregrise Featured By Owner Jul 9, 2013  Professional Writer
:clap: (great new word too)
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BloodshotInk Featured By Owner Jul 9, 2013
:D I thought so too :D
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Fantastalia Featured By Owner Jul 8, 2013
This is pretty cool
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BloodshotInk Featured By Owner Jul 9, 2013
:D Yay! :D 
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SilverWynd Featured By Owner Jul 8, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
I really like this some great imagery
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BloodshotInk Featured By Owner Jul 9, 2013
:D Yay! Thank you!
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SilverWynd Featured By Owner Jul 9, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
You are welcome
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Phantasm1 Featured By Owner Jul 8, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I like the lines "for hopes to become the cloudscape/and for dancing to become the norm".
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BloodshotInk Featured By Owner Jul 8, 2013
:D yay! Thanks !
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Phantasm1 Featured By Owner Jul 8, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
You're welcome.
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FoxofEbony Featured By Owner Jul 8, 2013
Amazing. I love how you describe the sky it really gets the imagination working :)
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BloodshotInk Featured By Owner Jul 8, 2013
:love: Thank you so much! It just sparked suddenly :>
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FoxofEbony Featured By Owner Jul 9, 2013
You're welcome :D
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phantasy-wings Featured By Owner Jul 8, 2013  Student General Artist
omg i love it! it sounds really nice reading it aloud!! :D
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BloodshotInk Featured By Owner Jul 8, 2013
:D Woo! Thanks!
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GhostOfTheEmptyGrave Featured By Owner Jul 8, 2013
The night is the most inspiring part of the day, isn't it?
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BloodshotInk Featured By Owner Jul 8, 2013
Definitely !
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BUNNEHS111 Featured By Owner Jul 8, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
I really like the focus on the word "tonight". It's kind of like how you should work hard for the future, but you still need to enjoy what you have now because if you don't, you'd never be happy. It's also a nice reminder to appreciate the past rather than try to disregard it or to mourn it's loss. Don't cry because it's over, smile because it happened. (Yes I made a Dr. Seuss quote at you. No, I am not sorry, nor will I ever be)
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BloodshotInk Featured By Owner Jul 8, 2013
Nods, thank you Bunnehs! And I don't mind the quote. :>
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