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I can't burn the street down, the tar will fill our lungs,
I can't fix the bridges, or the bolts bedded in our tongues.
I can't explain the constant, buried deep beneath the rose,
with all the other things I broke; death and all erodes.
I'm Kate.
I'm 26 years old and ... fucking it all up.

I've let my training kick in and now I find it impossible to open up to people. I've lost my closest friends, my partner, and myself, somewhere in that.

I am so proud and happy to be back on deviantart, and particuarly to be running #BurdenedHearts, but some nights I just get lonely. and I want to talk to people.. so say hi, and lets try and find some common ground.
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divineinyashakagome Featured By Owner Dec 17, 2013  Student Traditional Artist
> w < i love the last part about this poem.. :iconsnugplz:
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BloodshotInk Featured By Owner Dec 23, 2013
:) Thank you
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Theyreonlywords Featured By Owner Sep 18, 2013
Wow, I love the last line.
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BloodshotInk Featured By Owner Sep 22, 2013
:) Thank you
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Emorockchic Featured By Owner Sep 10, 2013
lovee thiss god! And a rose is my favourite flower
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tateetah Featured By Owner Sep 8, 2013  Student Traditional Artist
This is great! Perfect. Full of emotion. Excellent.
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BloodshotInk Featured By Owner Sep 9, 2013
:love: Thank you, gosh! So kind :D
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tateetah Featured By Owner Sep 15, 2013  Student Traditional Artist
You're welcome!
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PrussianPersephone Featured By Owner Sep 5, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
:hug: Sorry it took so long to read stuff...but this is beautiful. We all know what loneliness feels like. It's okay to want people to talk to.

You're beautiful, Kate, okay? <3
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BloodshotInk Featured By Owner Sep 5, 2013
:tighthug: Thanks hon, just lonely and stressed out. You know.
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Themoonofmyheart Featured By Owner Aug 30, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
You don't have to burn anything apart from the impressions that is blocking your mind and devouring your heart. You are young and you are suppose to make mistakes :) don't beat yourself about it. Everything is okay. You find it impossible to open up to people that is because you respect the information that is personal to you by preferring to keep it with yourself or only share it with someone who would value it with same respect :) Vent it out woman, let it go, watch yourself as it exits your door :heart: :hug:
Qita
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BloodshotInk Featured By Owner Aug 31, 2013
:tighthug: Thank you so much
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Bahama-dreams Featured By Owner Aug 29, 2013
This piece is so, so powerful to me, especially this line.  
"I can't fix the bridges, or the bolts bedded in our tongues"
So many times, the bridges aren't burnt yet, neither party talks to the other so nothing happens. Simple dialog would go so far. 
This is your genius at work in a minimalist style yet, conveyed so strongly. 
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UntamedUnwanted Featured By Owner Aug 29, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
This gorgeous piece of writing has been featured here: untamedunwanted.deviantart.com…
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leyghan Featured By Owner Aug 28, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Powerful words beautifully expressed. I'm 37 I'm sure I've got a lot more fucking up to do.  For what it's worth, from one stranger to a next, hang in there. :hug:
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ParkCity Featured By Owner Aug 27, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
lol if im on, tell me you are on! i want a friend to talk to also! :iconesplodeplz:
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NemoX7 Featured By Owner Aug 26, 2013   Writer
Hi there, there's quite a lot to take out of those four lines. 

I feel there's a sense of hopelessness when something appears to be impossible to achieve. I believe this is adequately shown with your repetition of "I can't" in the first two lines. 

The third lines "I can't" runs into a pivot for the poem, where instead of talking about hopelessness against impossibility, its turned towards an excuse "buried deep beneath the rose". "Rose" is a great word choice, which in this context, I believed to be an allusion of love, which has hidden the narrator's excuse, be it for hopelessness, or something else entirely.

The very last line stands out most of all, and makes the reader think."Death and all erodes" gives the poem a thought-provoking ending. Turning around a theme of impossible hopelessness into a hopeless possibility, as "death" is a concept of life that can not be mended, escaped from, nor can be hidden. 

Overall I thoroughly enjoyed reading this. And I'm very happy I took the time to study it and give you my observations. Even if they were not your original ideas in the initial composition of this delectable ode.

In relation to your description. I too, find it very hard to open up to people, and spend many a night alone just writing without speaking to anyone: even on dA. I enjoy myself on here and I have taken the time to try and do a bit more to help artists in the community who may feel they're being overlooked. I really hope in that aspect I'm doing the right thing. Plus I'd like to mention on another side-side note, you're running your new group splendidly.


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BloodshotInk Featured By Owner Aug 27, 2013
:love: :tighthug: I'm sorry you are alone too. Hi, I'm Kate. Thanks, I'm glad you are enjoying the group. Its fun to run :D
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NemoX7 Featured By Owner Aug 27, 2013   Writer
Loneliness can sometimes be good, especially when things get very chaotic. Hi, I'm James, and I'm glad you enjoy running your group. It wouldn't be the same without your guiding hand. It reminds me too, that I need to start getting my own group into gear. Been too long since I've actually properly managed it. :D
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BloodshotInk Featured By Owner Aug 27, 2013
:love: :giggle: I know that feeling. My other group is half dead. Okay more than half.

I don't think loneliness is ever good. Being alone can be good, but thats different.
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NemoX7 Featured By Owner Aug 27, 2013   Writer
Nod Indeed. I've left mine alone for a year, since personal reasons meant I couldn't regularly keep a tabs on it. Well, being homeless at the time, with no internet connection available on a regular basis didn't help me much.Facepalm
 
My loneliness is akin to isolation. Nearly all my friends have now forgotten about me, or don't have the time anymore. Sigh. Loneliness is a horrible thing to experience, but I've experienced it for so long, it's become a part of me. Sweating a little... 
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BloodshotInk Featured By Owner Aug 27, 2013
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NemoX7 Featured By Owner Aug 27, 2013   Writer
I hope I didn't make you sad there :( Sorry if I did. It never was my intention.
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DragonsChest Featured By Owner Aug 25, 2013  Professional Writer
Well Kate, I am always amazed at your talent to put power behind your words, no matter how many lines... :heart:
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BloodshotInk Featured By Owner Aug 27, 2013
:love:
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MissyMurder3000 Featured By Owner Aug 25, 2013
This is beautiful work and very relatable. Well done :) I wish the best for you
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BloodshotInk Featured By Owner Aug 27, 2013
:love: Thank you so much
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nightshade-keyblade Featured By Owner Aug 25, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
:iconsadhugplz: :iconcomfortplz: You're not alone on this one.
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BloodshotInk Featured By Owner Aug 27, 2013
:tighthug: I think I'll always be alone, because no matter how many peopel want to help I cant accept it
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nightshade-keyblade Featured By Owner Aug 27, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Not at all. You'll never be alone, because there is always at least one person that is walking your path, whether you realise it or not.

Maybe you can't or won't accept their help, but there is someone else in the same boat.

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FoxofEbony Featured By Owner Aug 25, 2013
This is an amazing piece but not as amazing as you; you're always so supportive of others and create all these wonderful groups to help people. So even though you might not believe me you're not fucking it all up. I'm really glad that I know you :tighthug: :heart:
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BloodshotInk Featured By Owner Aug 27, 2013
:tighthug: :tears: Thank you. It's so hard. So many people offer to help but I cant make myself accept it. :[
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FoxofEbony Featured By Owner Aug 27, 2013
You're welcome. I can't say I fully understand this feeling but I do a bit and I can get not being able to accept help as you strike me as one of those people who would walk a thousand miles for other people but find it hard to do something for yourself. Sorry if I've got you wrong on that but just to let you know I still think you're amazing and incredibly strong :)
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chromeantennae Featured By Owner Aug 25, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
:huggle: :heart: Oh Kathryn. Please stay strong. <3
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BloodshotInk Featured By Owner Aug 27, 2013
Im trying
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chromeantennae Featured By Owner Aug 27, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
:iconcomfortplz: :huggle:
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kreedantillesordo Featured By Owner Aug 25, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Wow Kathryn, this is really deep...
If you need something positive, please read this ->kreedantillesordo.deviantart.c…
I wrote it for my brother when he was feeling down...:)
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BloodshotInk Featured By Owner Aug 27, 2013
:tighthug: Thank you, :love:
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kreedantillesordo Featured By Owner Aug 27, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Anytime...:D
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camelopardalisinblue Featured By Owner Aug 25, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
:heart:

I'm dawni, I'm 30 and still fucking it all up. ;) Love, love, love.
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BloodshotInk Featured By Owner Aug 27, 2013
:giggle: Thank you.
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camelopardalisinblue Featured By Owner Aug 28, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
:love:
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UntamedUnwanted Featured By Owner Aug 25, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Oh Kathryn...you beautiful girl. I love you sooo much! Cheer up, gorgeous! :hug:
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BloodshotInk Featured By Owner Aug 27, 2013
:tighthug: Thank you hon
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StArMigEt Featured By Owner Aug 25, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Beautiful work dear Heart 
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BloodshotInk Featured By Owner Aug 27, 2013
Thanks!
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Aurora9912 Featured By Owner Aug 25, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
:heart:
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BloodshotInk Featured By Owner Aug 27, 2013
:tighthug:
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DrawingDreamLyrics Featured By Owner Aug 25, 2013
Aww I'll be your friend so you want to find some common ground well um what's your favorite color oh and nice name that was supposed to be my original name
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BloodshotInk Featured By Owner Aug 27, 2013
My favourite colour is yellow. I also love silver :>

Thanks! What is your name now ? :D
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