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I chew on the blubbery meat of my tongue,
But it revulses
So whenever I swallow I gag.

I try not to inhale the acrid hiss of discontent
That seeps out of the corners of my mouth
And runs a river down my chin;
It reminds me of peaches. I cry.

I have digested the venom
The black rotten root of my own plague;
Ingested it. Injected it. How quick I am to accept death to me.

As organs revolve, revolt, regurgitate
I caged butterflies in my abdomen
As if lushness couldn't catch them there.
I knew better.

I ple'd to the sewn-in stars and their makeshift tenants,
For salvation and for suicide.
They offered neither.

So I sit and stew in these bodily discharges.
Sweat, love, poetry, tears.
Let them pore out of me and penultimately;
(for my salvation hangs with the noose);

Erode me back to the stub of the soul,
That gnarled and raging root.
Who could ever love, a beast.
Ever feel like you might choke on all the things you wont say?

Oh well, another Word for the O'Driscoll archive: "revulses". A mixture of repulses, revulsion. I know revulse is already a word but im overriding it. Shakespeare did it, i do it. So yeah.

I will adjust punctuation when i get to a proper computer, apologies!
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Story-of-a-Mind Featured By Owner Jan 12, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I am fascinated by this one. I first read without looking up all the words I did not understand. And even without understanding all the words their sounds and the parts I understood drew me in. Then I looked up those words -with multiple dictionaries- which I had to do because you have such a great pool of words, or as we say in German a great "Wortschatz", a great treasure of words. Then I read it again. Even better, more fascinating. Then I read trough some of the comments -found out why I could not find "to revulse" in any dictionary- and got to the one where you explained the poem. A revelation.

And there is this last sentence I keep reading with twin meanings: "Who could ever love a beast?" , because it is difficult to love a beast and "Who could ever love? A beast!", because a beast knows what hardship is. A beast knows how to love truly, far beyond the surface.
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BloodshotInk Featured By Owner Jan 12, 2013
Smiles, Sorry, I do tend to make up or repurpose words often. On my website I've started a little dictionary but I haven't gone through even a quarter of my work to find the new words and add them to the dictionary yet.

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:nod: I love very deeply because of a big loss in my childhood. So your double meaning is very true for me.
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Story-of-a-Mind Featured By Owner Jan 12, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I actually like it if you make up new words. Language is a living thing after all. As long as you explain the ingredients you mixed into them, I will also be able to understand them :)
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BloodshotInk Featured By Owner Jan 13, 2013
Nods. Shakespeare did it and I consider him kin.
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Ashes-and-Snowflakes Featured By Owner Jan 5, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
I can't... Really explain why I like this. But it's intense, and I like that. Your vocabulary is astounding. "So whenever I swallow I gag" , I don't know why, but I really love that line.
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BloodshotInk Featured By Owner Jan 9, 2013
Thank you, it is meant to be intense. I was having an intense and bleak moment
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Ashes-and-Snowflakes Featured By Owner Jan 14, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
You're welcome. Intense moments are very good for writing, I get most of my inspiration from that.
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BloodshotInk Featured By Owner Jan 16, 2013
Me too, its easier to tap into the emotions
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Ashes-and-Snowflakes Featured By Owner Jan 17, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
I have a lot of intense moments, but little inspiration, time, or even motivation, if it doesn't flow right out. Life is difficult, man. XD
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Zevais Featured By Owner Jan 5, 2013  Hobbyist
I definitely indenify with this one. Most writings I favorite are writings that I made a creative response to... I think I'll favorite this one even without that.
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