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We slip and slide and fall
down curves and carrow places.
We cursive at the wall
in our undefinéd spaces.

Disjointed limbs extend
to strumpet our arrival,
to warn who are not friends
we will kill to survive all.

Hung upside-down haunters
hug branches in the Forrest.
Merry nightmare monsters,
Cheery snarling chorus,

Arachnic children know;
you can run but you can't hide
from this disparic truth,
darkness waits for you inside.

Although you seek the sun,
as all creaky spinsters might,
the night can't be out done
and it has you in its sight.

♥ Kathryn O'Driscoll © 2013

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The first two lines of this came to me as I was falling asleep and immediately they had to be written about. They demanded it. The problem was, carrow is not a word. I looked and looked but no other word was right in my mind. I thought perhaps I could solve this riddle if I thought about what I meant by it.

I was thinking about creepy little creatures, sinister and defective, prowling, hunting through the woods. As a metaphor for bad things happening in life. Mental health. Fate. Whatever you like...

and I decided that, fuck everything, I like the word carrow. But I couldn't quite explain what I meant by it, just that it felt right. A mixture of words like narrow, carbuncle, cantankerous, sour, carouse, carnage, carnivore,

So then I decided to continue on, but not be constrained necessarily by the meaning of individual words. To purposefully misuse a word (meaning wise) if it fits sound wise, or in some other way. So there are some instances like (undefined, disparic and arachnic) where words got made up (undefined, disparic, arachnid-like for those of you wondering), but mostly existing words got bent into a new shape.

Cursive reminded me of motion, and the flick of the pen. I imagined this as an insect hitting a wall with force, and combined with the curs (which reminded me of cursing and thus anger) I used this word.

Strumpet, like trumpet but with a darker seductive tone. It hints that the demons might not be displeasing to the eye.

Cheery, this should be anything but cheery, but I liked it. I thought about tampering with it more and making it cherry, but I am happy with cheery. It also sounds like this word should be cherry to rhyme with merry, and this disjointed feeling matches the meaning.

Creaky spinsters, which would be creepy spiders. I've called spiders spinsters in my poetry before (they spin webs! They are spinsters!) so that's not new, but creaky I liked. Gave an audio layer to the work...

and finally the title; Broken Birds and Stark Phrases was originally Broken Words from Dark Places.


So all in all I hope you guys enjoyed my creepy dark poem about life as a mutant, and my bastardisation of the English language. Oh and I rhymed, which I never do... so.. there's that.

If you are new to my work you can check out other words I've just plain made up in my OD Dictionary. 4 new words in one day. Swish!
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SkeletonsBasements Featured By Owner Jul 27, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Those last two lines are so incredible, especially considering my apparent unwanting to sleep xD
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BloodshotInk Featured By Owner Jul 30, 2013
:giggle: Thank you, I hope you sleep better soon
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SkeletonsBasements Featured By Owner Jul 31, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you! :) I have, and the poem still stays with me :) Excellent writing!
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InFAKtedMAshRUm Featured By Owner Jul 26, 2013
nice :)
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BloodshotInk Featured By Owner Jul 30, 2013
thank you!
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Zevais Featured By Owner Jul 13, 2013  Hobbyist
into my literature collection this one goes
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BloodshotInk Featured By Owner Jul 18, 2013
:D
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StarlightComet Featured By Owner Jun 23, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Well. I for one, loved it. The imagery you used was phenomenal and I love the flow of it it :)
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BloodshotInk Featured By Owner Jun 27, 2013
Gosh thank you so much Starlight!
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StarlightComet Featured By Owner Jun 27, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
You're more than welcome! ...Did that even make any sense at all?
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BloodshotInk Featured By Owner Jul 4, 2013
:giggle:
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DragonsChest Featured By Owner Jun 21, 2013  Professional Writer
Awesome imagery here... :clap:
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BloodshotInk Featured By Owner Jun 22, 2013
:D Thanks!
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DragonsChest Featured By Owner Jun 22, 2013  Professional Writer
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FoxofEbony Featured By Owner Jun 19, 2013
I love the way you've played with the meaning of words and made your own, it really adds to the feel of the poem as it disorientates the reader and challenges what they know :D
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BloodshotInk Featured By Owner Jun 19, 2013
:D Yay! Thank you!
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FoxofEbony Featured By Owner Jun 25, 2013
You're welcome :D
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lupus-astra Featured By Owner Jun 19, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Ooooh, I like the creepy vibe of this one. And I like your new words. :D
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BloodshotInk Featured By Owner Jun 19, 2013
:D yayyyy :D
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NekoNekoGirl997 Featured By Owner Jun 18, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Damn. Straight. You go!
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BloodshotInk Featured By Owner Jun 19, 2013
:D Thanks!! :love:
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AniPal Featured By Owner Jun 18, 2013  Student
It's great to see someone is still writing RHYMING poems as they are being a rare sight now, I too use some rhyming pattern.

This is really good poem. I love it.
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BloodshotInk Featured By Owner Jun 19, 2013
:giggle: Thanks! I don't do it often because for me personally I focus on meaning over rhyming, but sometimes its fun!
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AniPal Featured By Owner Jun 21, 2013  Student
Meaning? Give it to a school teacher and she would bring out a new meaning itself.

For example:

What I write: the curtains were blue

What I mean: the curtains were blue

What teacher explains: the blue color represents the poets feeling that he was feeling blue and he was... and the curtains express that.....



So, I never focus on the meaning part, all we gotta do it make the poem look beautiful. That's all :giggle:
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BloodshotInk Featured By Owner Jun 21, 2013
Lol, complete opposite of how I feel.
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Shoeborn Featured By Owner Jun 18, 2013  Student General Artist
I love the disjunction of the phrases; it's especially disturbing to read the original title...
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BloodshotInk Featured By Owner Jun 18, 2013
Awesome! Thank you so much. I'm in such a weird head space at the moment.
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Shoeborn Featured By Owner Jun 18, 2013  Student General Artist
You're most welcome! The odd kind or the spacey kind?
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Ellen-Souler Featured By Owner Jun 18, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Interesting
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BloodshotInk Featured By Owner Jun 18, 2013
Thanks Ellen!
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theGman0 Featured By Owner Jun 18, 2013  Hobbyist
Well written.
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BloodshotInk Featured By Owner Jun 18, 2013
:love: thank you so much ! :D
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Creepy little creatures have the right to exist and to live their lives. No matter how scary or unpleasant they are...
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