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A chalk outline waits for me
sometimes it slips into bed with my shadow
and I can do nothing but roll my eyes
like a mis=abused and weary parent,
but every night when my shadow
merges with the edges of the day's page
and blurs into a dirty midnight orange
I lie in bed and shudder;
without my shadow's protection I feel it,
a chalk outline waits for me.
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PrussianPersephone Sep 23, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I identify all too well with this.
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:iconrainbow-slash-pegasi:
Wow... Very well written...
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AyeAye12 Sep 18, 2013  Student Writer
Awesome stuff, but I think "mis=abused" should be a hyphen, not an equals sign?
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lombregrise Sep 18, 2013  Professional Writer
Your beautiful work is featured here fav.me/d6mt8z2

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:iconbahama-dreams:
I really like this piece. As dark as it is, I feel line four, the word parent means 
that there is also a feeling of control over this. Sort of like a misbehaved child. That's all I got. 
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dorroaker Sep 17, 2013  Student General Artist
very heavy, but very nice
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