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A chalk outline waits for me
sometimes it slips into bed with my shadow
and I can do nothing but roll my eyes
like a mis=abused and weary parent,
but every night when my shadow
merges with the edges of the day's page
and blurs into a dirty midnight orange
I lie in bed and shudder;
without my shadow's protection I feel it,
a chalk outline waits for me.
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lupus-astra Featured By Owner Sep 23, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I identify all too well with this.
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BloodshotInk Featured By Owner Sep 23, 2013
:tighthug: Sorry
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Rainbow-Slash-Pegasi Featured By Owner Sep 18, 2013
Wow... Very well written...
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AyeAye12 Featured By Owner Sep 18, 2013  Student Writer
Awesome stuff, but I think "mis=abused" should be a hyphen, not an equals sign?
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Exnihilo-nihil Featured By Owner Sep 18, 2013  Professional Writer
Your beautiful work is featured here fav.me/d6mt8z2

:rose:
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BloodshotInk Featured By Owner Sep 22, 2013
:love: Thank you!
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Bahama-dreams Featured By Owner Sep 17, 2013
I really like this piece. As dark as it is, I feel line four, the word parent means 
that there is also a feeling of control over this. Sort of like a misbehaved child. That's all I got. 
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BloodshotInk Featured By Owner Sep 22, 2013
:tighthug:
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dorroaker Featured By Owner Sep 17, 2013  Student General Artist
very heavy, but very nice
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BloodshotInk Featured By Owner Sep 22, 2013
Thanks!
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RestlessSands Featured By Owner Sep 17, 2013
... :rose:
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BloodshotInk Featured By Owner Sep 22, 2013
:tighthug:
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kreedantillesordo Featured By Owner Sep 16, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Wow, I'm just...wow, this is some pretty heavy wording Kath...:)
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BloodshotInk Featured By Owner Sep 22, 2013
I have bad days and good days <3
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kreedantillesordo Featured By Owner Sep 22, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Hey I completely understand...
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FoxofEbony Featured By Owner Sep 15, 2013
This is amazing :D
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BloodshotInk Featured By Owner Sep 20, 2013
haha yay! 
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RuntOfTheLitter Featured By Owner Sep 15, 2013
Methinks they wait for 'all' of us. (SMILES)

ROTL
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BloodshotInk Featured By Owner Sep 20, 2013
Nods
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UntamedUnwanted Featured By Owner Sep 15, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
This beautiful piece was featured here: untamedunwanted.deviantart.com…!
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BloodshotInk Featured By Owner Sep 20, 2013
thanks hon! Sorry I didnt see this sooner, I was moving into uni!
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MagicalJoey Featured By Owner Sep 14, 2013   Writer
This painted such a vivid picture of how I used to be, longing for death each night yet also not really longing for it. Made me shudder.
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BloodshotInk Featured By Owner Sep 15, 2013
:tighthug: sorry
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MagicalJoey Featured By Owner Sep 15, 2013   Writer
It's ok ducks
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DragonsChest Featured By Owner Sep 14, 2013  Professional Writer
I'm allergic to chalk, so I hope it is a crayon outline for me... :lol:
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BloodshotInk Featured By Owner Sep 15, 2013
:giggle: 
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NearlyInvisibleMind Featured By Owner Sep 14, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I love this:heart:
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BloodshotInk Featured By Owner Sep 15, 2013
:D Yay! thanks :]
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NearlyInvisibleMind Featured By Owner Sep 15, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Yeppers:aww:
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So dark and mysterious.
Random fact: a song I like, by Three Days Grace is also titled 'Chalk Outline'. 
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BloodshotInk Featured By Owner Sep 15, 2013
:giggle: Cool
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:iconghostoftheemptygrave:
Yeah :)
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