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Hear me read it!

In debris beside your house
there's the rotting stench of home,
where all the ghosts of lovers
and their broken chances go.

You smile at me, I shiver.
I taste your tongue on mine.
There's no dead for the sympathy
as you trespass bound'ry lines.

In the broken bulb of midnight
when the caskets rock to sleep
there beneath the soil bed
you lay me down, I weep.

You smile at me, I wonder
as you pin me underneath
if you know how I wish that I
were six feet more beneath.

In the soiled marital bed
where pigs and otters go to lie
you grunt your way to release
the only release I want, is to die.
Consummation, the act of having sex to seal the deal of marriage - or an experience of being unwillingly consumed. You decide.

♥ Kathryn O'Driscoll © 2013

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cskadoz Featured By Owner Aug 3, 2013   General Artist
great imagery, tone and pace! all better by your voice -- gyawd, i love your voice! :hug:
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BloodshotInk Featured By Owner Aug 7, 2013
Giggles, well thank you!
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Oseltamivir Featured By Owner Jul 25, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
This is a great piece of poetry.  I can relate in a way.  Makes me sad, but that just means you did a good job writing it.
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BloodshotInk Featured By Owner Jul 30, 2013
:tighthug: Thank you so much
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NearlyInvisibleMind Featured By Owner Jul 24, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I am awestruck and, therefor, can come up with nothing great to say other than that this piece is disturbingly superb.:clap:
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BloodshotInk Featured By Owner Jul 24, 2013
Aw, thank you! For superb and disturbing :D As now I know people are really understanding it
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NearlyInvisibleMind Featured By Owner Jul 25, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
You are very welcome:frail:
...Indeed:blackrose:
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nightshade-keyblade Featured By Owner Jul 24, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
When I read this, I thought it read somewhat like a murder ballad, until I got to the last two stanzas. In response to your question, the answer is yes. The deal is sealed...and she is consumed in turn.
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BloodshotInk Featured By Owner Jul 24, 2013
Nods.. for me its not about two different topics, its about one situation that involves both. you know.
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nightshade-keyblade Featured By Owner Jul 27, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Yeah, I get what you mean. This one was powerful, as always with your work.
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DevonEaton Featured By Owner Jul 22, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Beautiful, complex metaphors that still manage to clearly convey your message? Sounds like great poetry to me!
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BloodshotInk Featured By Owner Jul 24, 2013
:love: THANK YOU. :D
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Silencedbook9 Featured By Owner Jul 22, 2013  Student Writer
Need a hug?
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BloodshotInk Featured By Owner Jul 24, 2013
Nods
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Silencedbook9 Featured By Owner Jul 25, 2013  Student Writer
*hugs you* Hug 
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BloodshotInk Featured By Owner Jul 30, 2013
Thank you :)
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Silencedbook9 Featured By Owner Jul 31, 2013  Student Writer
No problem.
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ssensory Featured By Owner Jul 22, 2013   Writer
For being a traditional and fixed poem, it was simply amazing. The rhymes were perfect and everything sounded like it was well-written. Which is a really hard thing to do these days. :hug:
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BloodshotInk Featured By Owner Jul 24, 2013
Blushes, gosh thank you so much. You know I don't rhyme often. haha
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ssensory Featured By Owner Jul 26, 2013   Writer
:heart: you're very welcome (:
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OurBraveHeroine Featured By Owner Jul 22, 2013   Writer
Beautiful, really emotion and I love the first verse :heart:
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BloodshotInk Featured By Owner Jul 24, 2013
Thank you so much, it was emotional to write
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OurBraveHeroine Featured By Owner Jul 26, 2013   Writer
You're welcome :)
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I love the two sides to this poem; it's wonderfully written!
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BloodshotInk Featured By Owner Jul 24, 2013
Thank you so much
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You're welcome :)
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SMAdams Featured By Owner Jul 21, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I have mixed feelings about this piece. It is a beautifully written piece, beyond all those feelings. :heart:


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BloodshotInk Featured By Owner Jul 21, 2013
Mixed feelings, I'm curious. :tighthug:
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SMAdams Featured By Owner Jul 21, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
A lot of personal experiences can be reflected in this piece. It is interesting, mostly for me, to have the reaction I do. :)
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BloodshotInk Featured By Owner Jul 21, 2013
:tighthug: I was just checking in case I gave an impression I didn't mean to. People responded to a previous poem about this subject in a very distressing way for me. Was worried I'd given the wrong impression again
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SMAdams Featured By Owner Jul 21, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Oh no. It has nothing to do with you, directly or what you have written...directly. It is just my "inward" reaction to the piece, which isn't all negative :) And I understand what you mean about people's responses. :hug:
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BloodshotInk Featured By Owner Jul 24, 2013
:tighthug:
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SMAdams Featured By Owner Jul 25, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
:heart:
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XIStormIX Featured By Owner Jul 21, 2013   Digital Artist
Great writing! 
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BloodshotInk Featured By Owner Jul 21, 2013
:blush: Thank you so much!
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XIStormIX Featured By Owner Jul 21, 2013   Digital Artist
You're welcome.
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AskYukiNagato-Chan Featured By Owner Jul 21, 2013
Woh
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BloodshotInk Featured By Owner Jul 21, 2013
:blush:
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singagainsoon Featured By Owner Jul 21, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
absolutely fantastic. i love not only the flow of the poem, and your choice of words (which is perfect as always) but how both definitions of the word are clear and present in the poem. keep up the great work:heart:
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BloodshotInk Featured By Owner Jul 21, 2013
Gosh thank you Tardis :love: You are so kind to me!
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singagainsoon Featured By Owner Jul 21, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
you're very welcome! i wouldn't say it if it wasnt true c:
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BloodshotInk Featured By Owner Jul 21, 2013
it's still very very kind :love:
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WhiteHeartFlame Featured By Owner Jul 21, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I like this piece, though it is saddening.  Very well done.  :D
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BloodshotInk Featured By Owner Jul 21, 2013
Thank you so much :tighthug:
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WhiteHeartFlame Featured By Owner Jul 21, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
You're welcome so much!  Huggle! 
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BloodshotInk Featured By Owner Jul 21, 2013
:love: :tighthug:
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Phantasm1 Featured By Owner Jul 21, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I like the lines "There's no dead for the sympathy/ as you trespass boundr'y lines".
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BloodshotInk Featured By Owner Jul 21, 2013
me too! Thank you Phantasm :love:
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Phantasm1 Featured By Owner Jul 22, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
That's good. You're welcome :hug:
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NihilistDog Featured By Owner Jul 21, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
I really enjoyed this. I really never know how to comment on poetry, sorry, it's so very good, though.
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