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I lay my swan heart
in a nest of feather fluff;
sanguine, sweet and soft.
I lay my swan heart
in a frame not strong enough
to keep my love aloft.

♥ Kathryn O'Driscoll © 2013

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artsycat Featured By Owner Oct 2, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
I really quite like this! Simple yet expressive, flows well and makes sense (:
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BloodshotInk Featured By Owner Oct 3, 2013
aw, yay! Thank you :D
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Zevais Featured By Owner Aug 24, 2013  Hobbyist
i life my crow mind
outside of the tree of talons;
bleak, bitter, and abrasive.
i lift my crow mind
outside of the cage not weak enough
to keep my rage buried.
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sherbetblooms Featured By Owner Aug 15, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
just wow :heart:
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BloodshotInk Featured By Owner Aug 18, 2013
:love:
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UntamedUnwanted Featured By Owner Aug 9, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Gorgeous! I have made it my bid to get lost in your gallery today and I think I am in love with this one. Stunning images of fragility and love and sensitivity...Thank you for sharing! :)
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BloodshotInk Featured By Owner Aug 10, 2013
:D Yay!! Feel free to get lost, I have regular rescue parties to find people again :giggle: Thank you so much!
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UntamedUnwanted Featured By Owner Aug 10, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Heeheehee!! That made me giggle, I can just imagine sitting picking your poems and reading them in a paradise like garden (because that is how pretty your work is) and someone coming in and saying, "I'm here from the rescue party...we're here to take you back!" and I'll be saying, "NOOOOO!! Leave me here amongst these lovely poems! Don't take me away!!"
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stargirl2791 Featured By Owner Aug 8, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
this is gorgeous! i rarely ever like poems that rhyme; they too often seem forced or cheesy... but this is beautifully executed.
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BloodshotInk Featured By Owner Aug 10, 2013
Same, my mum told me when I was very young that rhyming often sacrafices meaning for sounds, and so I rarely do it
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kloe-oki Featured By Owner Aug 4, 2013
oooh it's really pretty :) I love the line "In a nest of feather fluff" It sounds really nice and welcoming in a way
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BloodshotInk Featured By Owner Aug 7, 2013
:) Thank you! and yes, I like that idea too
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kloe-oki Featured By Owner Aug 8, 2013
yeah :)
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lupus-astra Featured By Owner Aug 3, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
The imagery in this one really gets to me; swans are so beautiful. And always the center of a tragic fairy tale it seems.
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BloodshotInk Featured By Owner Aug 7, 2013
:tighthug: Yes it seems so
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Themoonofmyheart Featured By Owner Aug 3, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks for reminding me of swans. aren't they beautiful birds of love? if as tender as that is your heart you surely need to take care of it :) lovely poem
Qita
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BloodshotInk Featured By Owner Aug 7, 2013
:tighthug: Yes they are pretty, but also vicious!
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Themoonofmyheart Featured By Owner Aug 8, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
why vicious? :(
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BloodshotInk Featured By Owner Aug 8, 2013
They are super protective of their partners, nests and babies. They can break an arm in a second!
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Themoonofmyheart Featured By Owner Aug 8, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
wow I didn't know this. thanks for the info. more respect to the birds now lol 
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chromeantennae Featured By Owner Aug 2, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Lol, I love it when reading a piece can pull a vocal response and this made me say, "Oooh, bird imagery, God. Yes." :XD: Beeeeeaaaauuuutiful, Kathryn. :love:
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BloodshotInk Featured By Owner Aug 7, 2013
:D yay! thank you so so much!
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chromeantennae Featured By Owner Aug 7, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Lol, my pleasure. :D
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GregoryDelve Featured By Owner Aug 2, 2013  Student Writer
This is beautiful :) The imagery is strong, the meaning is powerful, and the rhyme is handled with grace
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BloodshotInk Featured By Owner Aug 2, 2013
Grins, thank you honey, :D 
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Imperial-Radiance Featured By Owner Aug 2, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Short and sweet, but also quite lovely. :heart:
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BloodshotInk Featured By Owner Aug 2, 2013
:) Thank you! I thought so too :D
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Imperial-Radiance Featured By Owner Aug 2, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
You're welcome. :hug:
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GhostOfTheEmptyGrave Featured By Owner Aug 2, 2013
Hearts are precious. It's only fair to protect them.
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BloodshotInk Featured By Owner Aug 2, 2013
I wish they were protected as much as they should be!
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GhostOfTheEmptyGrave Featured By Owner Aug 2, 2013
Yeah, me too.
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fantasylover103 Featured By Owner Aug 2, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Simple, sweet, gentle. :) I like it.
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BloodshotInk Featured By Owner Aug 2, 2013
:tighthug: Thank you, me too :)
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fantasylover103 Featured By Owner Aug 10, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
XD No problem! :3 
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NekoNekoGirl997 Featured By Owner Aug 2, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
I feel like if said, this one should be whispered. It's a quiet statement. It would be paired with a grim but accepting smile and a look out a window, dreaming of something so much more interesting then the tree in the yard. Then again Kath, your work always does that to me.
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BloodshotInk Featured By Owner Aug 2, 2013
Nods, it was a quiet little voice in my heart
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FierySpark Featured By Owner Aug 2, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
The feels<3
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ParkCity Featured By Owner Aug 2, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
deep
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BloodshotInk Featured By Owner Aug 2, 2013
Thanks :)
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TrinitySage Featured By Owner Aug 2, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
What a nice little poem :)
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BloodshotInk Featured By Owner Aug 2, 2013
:D Thank you so much!
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MagicalJoey Featured By Owner Aug 2, 2013   Writer
No words. Just wow.
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BloodshotInk Featured By Owner Aug 2, 2013
:tighthug: Thank you.. I like this one :D
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MagicalJoey Featured By Owner Aug 2, 2013   Writer
:hug:
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The-Funkiest-Penguin Featured By Owner Aug 2, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
It is amazing how much you can get across with such little words:D
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BloodshotInk Featured By Owner Aug 2, 2013
Thank you!! I think this is something most people can relate to which is why it's easier to be brief.
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ParkCity Featured By Owner Aug 2, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
MHM! :D U GO AND KEEP WRITING!
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The-Funkiest-Penguin Featured By Owner Aug 2, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
That is true:D
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