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I have never loved you.

I did not love you from that misty
September morning when we met.
I did not love you the first moment
I gazed into those saccharine eyes.

I have never, in fact, loved the roughness
in your soft voice when it says my name.
I have never loved the look on your face
when you smile over your bagel at me.

I don't love the cocoa streaked in your hair
or the way it ruffles its feathers upright
when you fall from your warm bed-nest,
half asleep, vulnerable and shy in the morning.

I do not love you.

I did not love you in that very moment
when your breath snagged against my lip
as it finally brushed yours - no, I did not.
I did not love you the first, second, or last time.

Listen to me carefully, my sweet -
I have never loved you, I will never love you.
I will not love you until my very last breath
and the absences of breath beyond that.

I will never love you for all that makes you
the warm, compassionate fighter in my corner.
I won't accept you for all your innocent flaws
and love you for all that you are, and could be.

I cannot love you.

I have never loved you
since the first time I laid my eyes on you.
This is a rewrite of an old old poem called Finding Neverlove. I found that people didn't understand right away that it is supposed to be read as a love poem. So I worked with `LadyLincoln, `thetaoofchaos, ~nightshade-keyblade, *ithaswhatitisnt, *bloodawni, *akkajess, *chromeantennae and `IrrevocableFate tonight in #TheLadiesofLit as part of my The Ladies of Lit chat night. I have to thank these guys they helped me so much with one of my old favourites so I really hope that this draft is understood and loved. :love:

♥ Kathryn O'Driscoll © 2013

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ArwynandCole Featured By Owner Jun 3, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Someone is seriously fooling him/herself!  I do love this!
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BloodshotInk Featured By Owner Jun 15, 2014
:giggle: You got it! Yay!
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ArwynandCole Featured By Owner Jun 15, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Boogie! Boogie! 
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ERaven77 Featured By Owner Dec 7, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
I got it. Actually I knew someone once that properly would have put it that way.
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BloodshotInk Featured By Owner Dec 8, 2013
:giggle: Awesome
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ERaven77 Featured By Owner Dec 20, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Sometimes you be surprised how many people do get something. On the other hand I am also surprised how many don't. Especially when it is clearly visible...
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ERaven77 Featured By Owner Dec 7, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
I got it. Actually I knew someone once that properly would have put it that way.
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ERaven77 Featured By Owner Dec 7, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
I got it. Actually I knew someone once that properly would have put it that way.
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NemoX7 Featured By Owner Oct 29, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Splendid poem. Really love how it plays out in a sort of reverse-psychological means. Great use in repetition in regards to "do not love", but what makes this stand out to me is the descriptive imagery present in"cocoa streaked hair", and "absences of breath". Plus great flow makes this easy on the eye and sumptuous to read aloud. Couldn't ask for a finer read to start the day.
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BloodshotInk Featured By Owner Nov 7, 2013
:D Thank you, it was a rewrite after I had it workshopped on DA, I felt that if the desccriptions were more detailed then the reverse statements would be more apparent. :D
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