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She wore a galaxy on her rib-cage,
settled high upon her breast,
when I kissed her I could taste it;
the currency of her success.
I named her Eve because it's the name most commonly associated with a) women and b) ribs. So it seemed natural. :giggle: Written in response to a prompt game, join in here: clickity!

♥ Kathryn O'Driscoll © 2013

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Simply beautiful. I can play out the words you are saying in my head and the image is a very vivid, dramatic, and captivating one. You really play with the readers imagination. So far I have not read any poems with such great wording: your poem is definitely original. I gave you 4 out of 5 stars for technique because it seems like it can be added on too; regardless of how long it is it is still amazing. As for the impact, I really felt chills and this good vibe pulsate through me as I read along to this.
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Eremitik Featured By Owner Nov 25, 2013
Interesting- reading this over and over, I get an image of high society, of being rich and not afraid of flaunting it.
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BloodshotInk Featured By Owner Dec 8, 2013
:giggle: That's fabulous!
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Eremitik Featured By Owner Dec 9, 2013
Is that something you intended?
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arteater1 Featured By Owner Nov 5, 2013
Gosh these lines of your are so good and so mature. How is it possible for one so young to do this??
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BloodshotInk Featured By Owner Nov 7, 2013
chuckles, mentally I'm simultaneously 19 and 47.
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arteater1 Featured By Owner Nov 8, 2013
I see.....that's great, because in 18 years PART of you can get social security then, while the other part is actually healthy and young enough to enjoy it!! :giggle:

(gosh............ I'm not only brilliant, but funny too....:laughing:      it's rare to find both of those qualities in one human being. :iconchickendanceplz:
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Zevais Featured By Owner Jul 13, 2013  Hobbyist
he stripped off the world from his scapula
dropping down from his back
when I hit his face I could feel it;
my own debts from his failures
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BloodshotInk Featured By Owner Jul 18, 2013
Gosh :[
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Zevais Featured By Owner Jul 18, 2013  Hobbyist
yeah, I guess it is dark... but it actually turned out to have a lot of hidden meaning
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BloodshotInk Featured By Owner Jul 18, 2013
nods
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kiki1690 Featured By Owner Jul 7, 2013  Student Writer
I like this a lot,abstract and excellent wording!
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BloodshotInk Featured By Owner Jul 8, 2013
Me too, thank you so much :} I'm so glad you enjoyed this!
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BarneyBetsington Featured By Owner Jun 28, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
I enjoyed this. Thank you for uploading.
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BloodshotInk Featured By Owner Jul 4, 2013
thank you for reading!
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neonsquiggle Featured By Owner Jun 28, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Lovely lovely lovely.
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BloodshotInk Featured By Owner Jul 4, 2013
yay! Thank you!
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dreamsinstatic Featured By Owner Jun 28, 2013
Your fantastic work has been featured in Friday Night Features.
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BloodshotInk Featured By Owner Jul 4, 2013
sorry for the late reply. FLU. x_X thank you!!
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BenHammonds Featured By Owner Jun 28, 2013   Writer
This is really good, I like it, says a lot with a little :)
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BloodshotInk Featured By Owner Jul 4, 2013
Thanks Ben!
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BenHammonds Featured By Owner Jul 4, 2013   Writer
you are most welcome :)
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TheGalleryOfEve Featured By Owner Jun 27, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
I just read the description ... :facepalm: ... And I thought "I" was your muse here! Ha! :icondivaplz:

(:giggle:) Love it, my dear Kathryn!!! :iconflyingheartsplz::iconsweethugplz::iconflyingheartsplz:
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BloodshotInk Featured By Owner Jul 4, 2013
:giggle: Thats why I wrote that, I was like, I hope Eve doesn't take this as about her. :giggle:
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shehrozeameen Featured By Owner Jun 27, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
These words are the best description on... well... feminist elements and what makes the true female admirable... that I'll probably never be able to write myself. thank you for writing them. :)
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BloodshotInk Featured By Owner Jun 27, 2013
No worries! Thanks for reading and commenting :love: I appreciate your support!
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shehrozeameen Featured By Owner Jun 27, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
:) you're welcome.
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VRK867 Featured By Owner Jun 27, 2013
Absolutely brilliant!
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BloodshotInk Featured By Owner Jun 27, 2013
:D Thank you!
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GeaAusten Featured By Owner Jun 26, 2013  Professional General Artist
God you're brilliant ! :-)
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BloodshotInk Featured By Owner Jun 27, 2013
You are too kind!
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GeaAusten Featured By Owner Jun 28, 2013  Professional General Artist
just the truth xx
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PrussianPersephone Featured By Owner Jun 24, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
This is so short and simple, yet extremely evocative and the image it renders in the mind is just fantastic. :)
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BloodshotInk Featured By Owner Jun 27, 2013
:) Thank you so much!
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NekoNekoGirl997 Featured By Owner Jun 23, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Touching as usual. You had a different tone, I think, in this one.
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BloodshotInk Featured By Owner Jun 27, 2013
:) Thanks, I do have different tones, just when I feel down it focuses on the darker ones.
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NekoNekoGirl997 Featured By Owner Jun 27, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
It's well exposed here
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MountainMew Featured By Owner Jun 23, 2013  Student Writer
This is a really great short piece. Love the way it sounds read out loud, it's nice.
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BloodshotInk Featured By Owner Jun 27, 2013
:) Thank you so much!
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TwilightPoetess Featured By Owner Jun 22, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
:eager: SO JOINING IN!!!
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BloodshotInk Featured By Owner Jun 27, 2013
:D
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Phantasm1 Featured By Owner Jun 22, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Cool, yeah it definitely works.
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BloodshotInk Featured By Owner Jun 22, 2013
Fun :D!
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Phantasm1 Featured By Owner Jun 22, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Yeah :).
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