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I remember the day I caught him 'gardening'. His cheeks stained cherry with the brisk wind that trotted beside him up and down the smothered garden path. He dropped a seed as his feet brushed past each other. Up and down he walked, a solemn lieutenant. I asked him what he was doing and those wide sky eyes reflected the ice as he told me he was trying to grow flowers for his mother. I looked at the seeds spilt on the snow and told him that they could never grow in these circumstances. I will never forget the clench in my heart when he responded, with a child's tongue; "I know".
About abandoning hope at a young age.
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mina12310 Featured By Owner Oct 2, 2013  Student General Artist
wow great, so sad
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BloodshotInk Featured By Owner Oct 3, 2013
Nods
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Sammur-amat Featured By Owner May 3, 2013   General Artist
this sure hit me somewhere deep. :heart:
congratulations on the DLD, you lovely, lovely soul! :cuddle:
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tonepainter Featured By Owner Apr 19, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Congrats on the DLD! :D
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BloodshotInk Featured By Owner Apr 19, 2013
Thank you! Goodness :DD
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Hfeather53 Featured By Owner Apr 17, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
congratulations on the DLD, darling :heart:
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BloodshotInk Featured By Owner Apr 18, 2013
:blush:! :excited:! Oh my gosh.
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brain-tree Featured By Owner Apr 17, 2013   General Artist
Poignant, excellent wording. Great work :)
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BloodshotInk Featured By Owner Apr 18, 2013
:tighthug: Thank you so much! :blush: Gosh!
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rlkirkland Featured By Owner Apr 17, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Congratulations on your DLD.
Peer recognition is such a heartening thing. :)
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BloodshotInk Featured By Owner Apr 18, 2013
:tighthug: It really is, I'm honoured! :']
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xlntwtch Featured By Owner Apr 16, 2013   Writer
Congratulations on your DLD! :D
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BloodshotInk Featured By Owner Apr 18, 2013
:tighthug: You! Thank you! and Dough :] You guys are too kind to me !!
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xlntwtch Featured By Owner Apr 18, 2013   Writer
:iconyourewelcomesignplz: ! ... :hug:
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DailyLitDeviations Featured By Owner Apr 16, 2013
Your wonderful literary work has been chosen to be featured by =DailyLitDeviations in a news article that can be found here: [link]

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BloodshotInk Featured By Owner Apr 18, 2013
Oh my gosh! Thank you!!
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exquisiteoath Featured By Owner Mar 14, 2013  Student General Artist
Perfect.
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BloodshotInk Featured By Owner Mar 22, 2013
:rose: Thank you
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exquisiteoath Featured By Owner Mar 22, 2013  Student General Artist
You're most welcome.
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haphazardmelody Featured By Owner Mar 10, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Oh boy. When you've given up on hope but feel like you have to keep going through the motions anyway, just in case hope was worth it after all. Or at least, that's what this said to me. Beautiful. :+favlove:
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BloodshotInk Featured By Owner Mar 22, 2013
Thank you valkvick, thats a beautiful interpretation
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This gorgeous piece has been featured!: [link]

Please consider taking a peek at the other pieces and faving the article to support the other artists :)
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BloodshotInk Featured By Owner Mar 9, 2013
Squeee! thank you!
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AzizrianDaoXrak Featured By Owner Mar 9, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
^^
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xlntwtch Featured By Owner Mar 8, 2013   Writer
:+fav: I hope one day he looks up and up to the sky and that will be reflected in his "wide sky eyes" instead of ice.
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shehrozeameen Featured By Owner Mar 6, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
poor child. Closure wasn't provided when he needed it. And now he's just trying to live life.

:( Hope, somehow, that his life turns out for the better.
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BloodshotInk Featured By Owner Mar 7, 2013
Nods, me too :rose:
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shehrozeameen Featured By Owner Mar 7, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
*nodding*
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ArsenicBlue Featured By Owner Mar 5, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Ow!My heart strings...Q.Q
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BloodshotInk Featured By Owner Mar 7, 2013
:tighthug:
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TGIBA Featured By Owner Mar 5, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Awwhh... Sweet and sad...
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BloodshotInk Featured By Owner Mar 7, 2013
Nods :tighthug:
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TGIBA Featured By Owner Mar 7, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Reminds me of some bittersweet stuff.
Great job! :D :tighthug:
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Dani-Claw Featured By Owner Mar 5, 2013  Student Traditional Artist
This is so precious, but oh so starkly real. What a lovely little piece...
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BloodshotInk Featured By Owner Mar 7, 2013
Grins, yay! thank you so much!
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Zevais Featured By Owner Mar 5, 2013  Hobbyist
He remembers the day he caught me "celebrating". My fingers weren't covered black with unwashable taint that always hid beneath me and cast a shadow on my party. I lifted my glass to myself as he waited from a distance. I ran in circles, a dog with a envious tail. He knew what I was up to as his narrow, storm-filled words fueled a fire as I told myself I could be happy forever. He broke the glass I had lifted on the floor, and he told me that under any circumstance that the celebration was over. He forgets to let go of my mind from time to time and tells, with a serpent's breathe, "You're mine".
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BloodshotInk Featured By Owner Mar 7, 2013
:rose:
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nightshade-keyblade Featured By Owner Mar 5, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Reminds me so much of this book I read for my Extended Essay. It's called The Remains of the Day and there is a scene quite similar to what you've written although not the same.
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BloodshotInk Featured By Owner Mar 7, 2013
Weird :S
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nightshade-keyblade Featured By Owner Mar 7, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Yeah :s
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Sage6pathz Featured By Owner Mar 5, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
yep, I'm a sucker for this stuff. Loving it :)
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BloodshotInk Featured By Owner Mar 7, 2013
:giggle: Thanks!
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HONAW Featured By Owner Mar 5, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
I love it
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BloodshotInk Featured By Owner Mar 7, 2013
yay! thank you !
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HONAW Featured By Owner Mar 7, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Welcome :D
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OuroborosRagnarok Featured By Owner Mar 5, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
aww, it's sad. But I don't see it as giving up hope, more... realising that effort is what really counts.
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BloodshotInk Featured By Owner Mar 7, 2013
A couple of people have thought more optimistically than me :giggle:
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OuroborosRagnarok Featured By Owner Mar 7, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
not like that's difficult, knowing you.
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FoxofEbony Featured By Owner Mar 5, 2013
Beautiful :D
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BloodshotInk Featured By Owner Mar 7, 2013
:>
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