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There's a reason why
both my heart and my gun
have empty chambers baby,
       and it's you.

♥ Kathryn O'Driscoll © 2013

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I admit that my first reaction was laughter. Enjoyment at the thought, and the combination of images that you use. I could see this remaining as a stand-alone short poem, part of a longer one (or a series), or as becoming part of a song. This hints at a full, dramatic story, without bothering to give the details, and that it was gives this its appeal. We've all been there, or are going to be there someday, at least emotionally. Granted, I've never shot anybody with a real gun in a fit of hurt feelings. At the same time, the experience of being hurt gives everybody the impetus, the motivation to consider it.

Maybe I'll start loading a water pistol for use.
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It is very short... That being said, I believe it is the perfect length and I love it. At first I was thinking damn this is too short but after I read what was in front of me I decided it was just right. It's short and to the point without being vulgar or insulting to your audience.

The idea of, dare I say, murdering over love, whether lost or forbidden or whatever, is an amazing concept to me. Very appealing content.

I have an amazing Ruger SR9c that you could borrow for the next one if the need arises :)
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ShadowedAcolyte Featured By Owner Oct 28, 2014
Aww, I didn't read it as suicide at first--I read some dark humor.
BloodshotInk Featured By Owner Dec 11, 2014
I'm dark like that. Mwahahhaha :P 
hopeburnsblue Featured By Owner Apr 4, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
 When I first read this, my mouth fell open in surprise, and then it clicked. Very sad, but you are also very, very clever with your word choice.
BloodshotInk Featured By Owner Apr 15, 2014
Thank you! That means a lot! :blush:
DailyLitDeviations Featured By Owner Apr 3, 2014
Your wonderful literary work has been chosen to be featured by DLD (Daily Literature Deviations) in a news article that can be found here. Be sure to check out the other artists featured and show your support by :+fav:ing the News Article.

Keep writing and keep creating.
BloodshotInk Featured By Owner Apr 15, 2014
Thank you :love:!!
JadedStrayHyena Featured By Owner Dec 17, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Short and to the (deadly) point.
BloodshotInk Featured By Owner Dec 23, 2013
yay! Thanks :D
ActsofArt Featured By Owner Oct 1, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Your 'slap in the face' poem has made an excellent addition to my october feature: Please come check it out!!
BloodshotInk Featured By Owner Oct 3, 2013
:giggle: this confused me a little because I've written a poem called A Slap in the Face. But thank you!1
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