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I admit that my first reaction was laughter. Enjoyment at the thought, and the combination of images that you use. I could see this remaining as a stand-alone short poem, part of a longer one (or a series), or as becoming part of a song. This hints at a full, dramatic story, without bothering to give the details, and that it was gives this its appeal. We've all been there, or are going to be there someday, at least emotionally. Granted, I've never shot anybody with a real gun in a fit of hurt feelings. At the same time, the experience of being hurt gives everybody the impetus, the motivation to consider it.
It is very short... That being said, I believe it is the perfect length and I love it. At first I was thinking damn this is too short but after I read what was in front of me I decided it was just right. It's short and to the point without being vulgar or insulting to your audience.
The idea of, dare I say, murdering over love, whether lost or forbidden or whatever, is an amazing concept to me. Very appealing content.
I have an amazing Ruger SR9c that you could borrow for the next one if the need arises
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This is a cool piece my thoughts first went to suicide (as you say in your artist's comments), but this could just as easily be read as the words of a murderer. There's a really interesting light-heartedness added to the sobriety of the piece through the word 'baby'. Nicely done!
love it top and bottom... love the ambiguity of 'baby'/who is you... the *speaker's* and baby's sex are open ended... as why the gun is now empty... is this a crime against *baby* or are they back to back... against others...