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Moths;
       fluttering ghosts
       of dreams long gone
       dead and passed –
       and past.

       They ache for the love
               of light
       but their blind groping
               for the truth

                       Burns them.

In the end,
       all moths die
       as Icarus –
       as infantile projections
       of our innocence
                       as hope too, dies at last.
I hate moths. >_<

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I love the indentations and set up of the poem overall. There is an introduction as well as a closing to the poem which I like. I also enjoy the perspective you have of the moth. I have never thought of this creature in the light that you put it in here -passed dreams and "fluttering ghosts". The fact that moths desire light and that they cannot see it without burning is the sad truth. I appreciate the Icarus reference which is completely original in my opinion. The fact that his dream died just as moths, resembling dreams, also die. In the last two lines the poem seems more depressing, but still eye-opening. Throughout the entire poem I have a clear image in my head, which I find unique to my past thoughts of the moth. It also gives me an almost nostalgic feeling.
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This piece is very interesting with the way you have so concretely displayed it to be. In its simplicity, you have created a vision of the moth and the metaphor of hope it has in this work.

I loved how you displayed the poem so that when reading each stanza, it gives pause for each thought about the image within it. You also did an interesting mix with the different line breaks too, which is very unique. Not only is there a type of continuation of thought, but also a glide onto each individual thought.

Keep it up!

Sincerely

~Panther~
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Thisisnotmadebyacat Featured By Owner Jun 18, 2014  Hobbyist Artist
Wonderful! I can see where you were going with this and I honestly thing that this was written beautifully!


Don't feel bad...I really don't like moths much either. ^^'
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BloodshotInk Featured By Owner Jun 18, 2014
Aw thank you ! 
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Zylund Featured By Owner May 3, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
Wow ._. That is pretty deep. I like love how you put the moths as ghosts :D
And overall this is written amazingly n_n
Great work!
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BloodshotInk Featured By Owner May 11, 2014
:love: THANK YOU. Moths are so scary. The other night I turned off my light to go to sleep and a moth LANDED ON MY NOSE.

outrage.
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Zylund Featured By Owner May 11, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
Oh my gawsh I know >.< A moth once flew into my friend's mouth while he was yawning! It must have been terrible >.<
You are most welcome c: And I am sorry to hear about the moth landing on your nose :giggle:
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kloe-oki Featured By Owner Apr 20, 2014
breath taking. really good. i love moths! lol but very pretty :)
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BloodshotInk Featured By Owner Apr 21, 2014
:giggle: thank you!
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kloe-oki Featured By Owner Apr 21, 2014
:D
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wallawallaw Featured By Owner Feb 28, 2014
so true... hope dies last
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BloodshotInk Featured By Owner Mar 29, 2014
:tighthug: Sadly
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