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I'm desperate to find her
to steal another kiss.
Catching Cinderella
should be simpler than this.
Only small but I like the rhythm of this one.
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Deaths-Lament Featured By Owner Feb 10, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
This is... :heart: This is always in my head, thank you for being as amazing as you are to share this :hug:
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BloodshotInk Featured By Owner Feb 24, 2014
:love: Oh thank you
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elianoretta Featured By Owner Nov 26, 2013
very seet
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BloodshotInk Featured By Owner Dec 8, 2013
Thanks!!
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goddess-of-ravens Featured By Owner Oct 28, 2013
Magic.
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BloodshotInk Featured By Owner Nov 7, 2013
:D Thanks
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ActsofArt Featured By Owner Oct 14, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
I like it, you're definitely right about the rhythm. You know what I really like is that it has a little taste of that plaintive tone that guys get sometimes, if you know what I'm talking about. very nice. keep it up.
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BloodshotInk Featured By Owner Oct 20, 2013
:giggle: I do!
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WinterLeave Featured By Owner Sep 27, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
I love this!
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BloodshotInk Featured By Owner Sep 28, 2013
yay!
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OneDreamOneMoon Featured By Owner Sep 27, 2013
The rythm is indeed amazing :D
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BloodshotInk Featured By Owner Sep 28, 2013
:D Thanks!
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lupus-astra Featured By Owner Sep 23, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
All I can think of is Once Upon a Time aaaahhhh I love Charming he's great
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BloodshotInk Featured By Owner Sep 23, 2013
:giggle: yeah
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Wonder-freak Featured By Owner Sep 22, 2013
wow, nice words. :)
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BloodshotInk Featured By Owner Sep 22, 2013
:D thanks!
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Wonder-freak Featured By Owner Oct 2, 2013
YW! :D
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FoxofEbony Featured By Owner Sep 21, 2013
Amazing :D
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BloodshotInk Featured By Owner Sep 22, 2013
thanks!
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FoxofEbony Featured By Owner Sep 23, 2013
You're welcome :D
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Deaths-Lament Featured By Owner Sep 21, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
This is really really sweet =P Short but awesome :)
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BloodshotInk Featured By Owner Sep 22, 2013
:D Thank you so much!
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IridescentCatalyst Featured By Owner Sep 21, 2013
Very nicely put together!
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BloodshotInk Featured By Owner Sep 22, 2013
thank you! 
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JustSoAsian Featured By Owner Sep 21, 2013
cute :iconlovecatplz:
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BloodshotInk Featured By Owner Sep 22, 2013
:D thanks!
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sneha07 Featured By Owner Sep 21, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
so amazing. what you have done is called in hindi as 'gagar mein sagar bharna' that means describing so much ia so little. :D
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BloodshotInk Featured By Owner Sep 22, 2013
:D I try! I often write short works.
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sneha07 Featured By Owner Sep 23, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
thats awesome!
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MagicalJoey Featured By Owner Sep 21, 2013   Writer
Excellent rhyme and rhythm - but maybe Charming is too busy with Snow White?
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BloodshotInk Featured By Owner Sep 22, 2013
Curious lol
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KyotoPhoenix Featured By Owner Sep 21, 2013
So small, but still packing a punch.
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BloodshotInk Featured By Owner Sep 22, 2013
:D <33
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blubbityblub Featured By Owner Sep 21, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Amazing. I love this :)
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BloodshotInk Featured By Owner Sep 22, 2013
:D Yay, thanks! :D
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DragonsChest Featured By Owner Sep 20, 2013  Professional Writer
Sometimes small poems can pack a big punch...
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BloodshotInk Featured By Owner Sep 22, 2013
I try !
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Chyna-Angel-Girl Featured By Owner Sep 20, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Wow, I really like this one :D
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BloodshotInk Featured By Owner Sep 22, 2013
:giggle: Yay! Thanks!
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yoichi-masaki Featured By Owner Sep 20, 2013
Ah, but its not worth it if you don't work for it
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BloodshotInk Featured By Owner Sep 22, 2013
:giggle:
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MorningMelon Featured By Owner Sep 20, 2013  Hobbyist
Remarkable rhythm and rhyme, indeed.
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BloodshotInk Featured By Owner Sep 22, 2013
Thanks!
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MorningMelon Featured By Owner Sep 22, 2013  Hobbyist
'Welcome :)
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Ah, fairy tales... No matter what they still touch our soft spot.
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BloodshotInk Featured By Owner Sep 22, 2013
:>
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EmmyIsAZebra Featured By Owner Sep 20, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
LOVE this. So cute. XD
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BloodshotInk Featured By Owner Sep 20, 2013
Yay! :D Thanks Zebra~!
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EmmyIsAZebra Featured By Owner Oct 10, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
my pleasure
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CoHMissKyo Featured By Owner Sep 20, 2013
I kind of feel like this needs to be part of a rock song. o.O
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