It's clear to see
that I'm as fragile
as glass -
and every time
that you look through me;
I crack up.
I love short and to the point poems.
in which way should i understand this?
clever, interesting and ambiguous enough to have multiple meanings, your writing is making me jealous.
I like the unease with which the final line left me.
Wow, I really like this one Kath...
It's kinda sad. But funny at the same time. Well done.
A good one. Thanks.
The word play in this is clever. "Clear to see…glass…look through me…" Plus I like the last line because it makes the ending so ambiguous. There is room for various interpretations. Is it irony, sarcasm or emotional fragility? The reader is left to decide.
I see you still do not fail to amaze me with your poetry ODriscoll.
I honestly would have preferred the poem to end with 'I crack' but I've seen your reasons as to why you used 'crack up' in the other comments.
So, fair enough my lady, fair enough.
How in the world you manage to put into words these subtle little things I have absolutely no idea, but there's one thing I can tell you and it's that I love love love it. You just know exactly which words to use, what expressions. To me, (I don't even know where this came from,) your writing is like a clear glass sphere- transparent, but magnifying certain things that would be just small details if you left it to anyone else. So this piece pretty much made me think of your writing. Even to the cracking up part. You inspire me and make me despair all at once. You jumpstart my muse, yet you make me set my standards so high I'll never be able to write something that satisfies me. And I'm pretty much rambling here so I'll stop, but consider this my informal critique.
irony - love it!
This is kind of sad and introspective...but it also made me laugh at the end. So I hope I'm getting out of this what you intended!
I like it.
I really love this
and the title fits really really well
(there I go adding two reallys, NaNo will do that to ya)
but I'm not sure at the end is "crack up" meaning laughing or breaking?