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It's clear to see
that I'm as fragile
as glass -
and every time
that you look through me;
I crack up.
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exoticfirefly Featured By Owner Dec 2, 2013
I love short and to the point poems.
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BloodshotInk Featured By Owner Dec 8, 2013
me too! :D
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Dragkor Featured By Owner Nov 25, 2013
in which way should i understand this?
Nice scrap :D
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BloodshotInk Featured By Owner Dec 8, 2013
That I like him, he doesnt like me.
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ActsofArt Featured By Owner Nov 19, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
this clever bit of writing has landed in my most recent feature fav.me/d6uwhje please check it out!
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BloodshotInk Featured By Owner Nov 21, 2013
THANKS :D
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ActsofArt Featured By Owner Nov 18, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
clever, interesting and ambiguous enough to have multiple meanings, your writing is making me jealous.
Well done :)
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BloodshotInk Featured By Owner Nov 21, 2013
:D Thank you so so much!!
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0hgravity Featured By Owner Nov 7, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
I like the unease with which the final line left me.
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BloodshotInk Featured By Owner Nov 7, 2013
yay! Phew. Thank you :D
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kreedantillesordo Featured By Owner Nov 4, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Wow, I really like this one Kath...:thumbsup:
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BloodshotInk Featured By Owner Nov 7, 2013
yay! Thanks :D
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GhostOfTheEmptyGrave Featured By Owner Nov 4, 2013
It's kinda sad. But funny at the same time. Well done.
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BloodshotInk Featured By Owner Nov 9, 2013
Thank you :rose: :)
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No problem.
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aldwarke Featured By Owner Nov 4, 2013
A good one. Thanks.
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BloodshotInk Featured By Owner Nov 7, 2013
Thank you :love:
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cerealnovels Featured By Owner Nov 4, 2013
The word play in this is clever. "Clear to see…glass…look through me…" Plus I like the last line because it makes the ending so ambiguous.  There is room for various interpretations.  Is it irony, sarcasm or emotional fragility?  The reader is left to decide.
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BloodshotInk Featured By Owner Nov 9, 2013
Thank you so much! I'm glad you enjoyed this as it is :D
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PuzzledHeartBox Featured By Owner Nov 3, 2013
I see you still do not fail to amaze me with your poetry ODriscoll. 

I honestly would have preferred the poem to end with 'I crack' but I've seen your reasons as to why you used 'crack up' in the other comments.
So, fair enough my lady, fair enough.

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BloodshotInk Featured By Owner Nov 9, 2013
:love: Thank you so much, :))
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PuzzledHeartBox Featured By Owner Nov 11, 2013
You're truly welcome.
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dragonet98 Featured By Owner Nov 3, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
How in the world you manage to put into words these subtle little things I have absolutely no idea, but there's one thing I can tell you and it's that I love love love it. You just know exactly which words to use, what expressions. To me, (I don't even know where this came from,) your writing is like a clear glass sphere- transparent, but magnifying certain things that would be just small details if you left it to anyone else. So this piece pretty much made me think of your writing. Even to the cracking up part. You inspire me and make me despair all at once. You jumpstart my muse, yet you make me set my standards so high I'll never be able to write something that satisfies me. And I'm pretty much rambling here so I'll stop, but consider this my informal critique.
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cskadoz Featured By Owner Nov 3, 2013   General Artist
:hug: irony - love it!
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BloodshotInk Featured By Owner Nov 7, 2013
:D 
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haphazardmelody Featured By Owner Nov 3, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
This is kind of sad and introspective...but it also made me laugh at the end. So I hope I'm getting out of this what you intended!
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BloodshotInk Featured By Owner Nov 7, 2013
:D Yep. ABSURD LIFE.
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AskYukiNagato-Chan Featured By Owner Nov 3, 2013
I like it.
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BloodshotInk Featured By Owner Nov 7, 2013
Thank you!!
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PuppetMaster1965 Featured By Owner Nov 3, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I really love this
and the title fits really really well
(there I go adding two reallys, NaNo will do that to ya)
but I'm not sure at the end is "crack up" meaning laughing or breaking?
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BloodshotInk Featured By Owner Nov 3, 2013
to me it means that I mean :giggle: 
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BloodshotInk Featured By Owner Nov 3, 2013
It means three things. One, to laugh at the absurdity of life. Two, to break. and Three, to do both, with the hysteria of someone who is invisible.
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PuppetMaster1965 Featured By Owner Nov 3, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I really like all three reasons!
especially the first ;)
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