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It's 2am
and the calling birds 
are hatching in my heart, 
I feel it crack and they emerge. 
Feel them drilling on my ribs, 
the steady anxious thrum 
of a flight risk 
waiting to happen.

It's 3am 
and I can't breathe, 
memories of you 
are nesting in my throat 
and now 
I can't work around them. 
It's cutting off the circulation, 
and my frantic heart 
tries to keep on.

It's 5am 
and tears scratch their directions 
into my cheeks, 
they flounder and meander
and they erode. 
My skin and soul is scraped down 
layer by layer 
to nought.

It's 8am 
and another day is heralded 
by the angry flutterings in my chest. 
I try to swallow my pride, 
dam the tears 
and crawl through the dark again.
Coughing up blood
and inhaling iron filings
(The remainder of 
what used to be my life).
2am anxiety attack. Trying not to lose control.
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KimchiMuse Featured By Owner Jun 2, 2013  Student Writer
I can really feel the anxiety and desperation build here so naturally. I like the rhythm you keep here too.
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BloodshotInk Featured By Owner Jun 3, 2013
Thank you so much, this is based on my experiences
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LadyMortimus Featured By Owner May 22, 2013  Student General Artist
You could not have explained my feelings when I have anxiety better. I absolutely love the raw feelings this poem gives off. Amazing job. :love:
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BloodshotInk Featured By Owner May 24, 2013
Nods, thank you so much. I have anxiety too.
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RapidashLove Featured By Owner May 8, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Try to stay in control. It takes a hundred times longer to put yourself back together than it does to fall apart.
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BloodshotInk Featured By Owner May 14, 2013
nods
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TeaPhotography Featured By Owner Apr 27, 2013  Professional General Artist
This is really wonderfully written. :aww:

I love the chronological format here, really contributes more meaning and strength to the content. :nod:

Well done. :hug:
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fantasylover103 Featured By Owner Apr 27, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I think you're the only person who can write my feelings without trying. .-.
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PrussianPersephone Featured By Owner Apr 26, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
You're not alone.

Stay beautiful, please. The world needs more people like you who can paint their souls with words.
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hae-ri Featured By Owner Apr 25, 2013  Professional Photographer
These are my feelings. You have written out them for me to read them now, at midnight. I don't know if it sounds stupid to thank you for something that made me cry, but thank you nevertheless - you are beautiful, you have a beautiful way with words and I hope we will both always rise up to a better day. I wish you all the best.
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blubbityblub Featured By Owner Apr 25, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Beautiful. I do hope you are alright.
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FoxofEbony Featured By Owner Apr 24, 2013
You're so amazing to be able to go through that and turn it into something so beautiful, simply amazing :)
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Tuishimi Featured By Owner Apr 24, 2013
Beautiful poem from it, tho'!
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Pen-and-mouse Featured By Owner Apr 24, 2013
You are SO wonderful. :heart:
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qtluvbugtx712 Featured By Owner Apr 24, 2013
I love your work so much! This is brilliant, perfect :D
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ArikaRinkishika Featured By Owner Apr 24, 2013   Writer
ouch!

:D

hope all has become better after that! :blushes:
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MozartsNemesis Featured By Owner Apr 23, 2013
wonderful progression, amazing poem overall. a fave.
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PuzzledHeartBox Featured By Owner Apr 23, 2013
Panic stricken in dark ray's light.
Thoughts consumed by delirious fright.
Don't worry, this too shall fade.
You're only petrified.


You've got quite the way with words.
Poem after poem you keep amazing me.
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ToaTepsak Featured By Owner Apr 23, 2013  Student Traditional Artist
:iconhugplz: Aah, feel better.. :iconhugplz:
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KuraiTenshiV Featured By Owner Apr 23, 2013  Hobbyist
good description of anxiety.
Stay strong, and if not rely on those that can help.
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ithaswhatitisnt Featured By Owner Apr 23, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
:iconsadhugplz: Kate...:huggle:
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BloodshotInk Featured By Owner Apr 23, 2013
:tighthug: sorry
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ithaswhatitisnt Featured By Owner Apr 23, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
It makes me sad to know you're sad. :tighthug: That's all. :heart:
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BloodshotInk Featured By Owner Apr 28, 2013
:tighthug:
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