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Just give me one dream that isn't see-through.
One substantiated claim to reality,
that I might hold onto life with.
Every quivering cell, mid-osmosis, begs you
for a shred of dignity with my tea.
Just one chance for something heavy,
something hard and room temperature. Real.
I don't want to look through my day dreams
and see someone else's face there.
I don't want to dream of those people
who may make, or break me, in the future tense.
I am tired of milky white and reflective black.
It is time for a life of colour and hope -
and not looking back to see if the past
matches up with the jigsaw map to the end game.
I want to be in the game, participating,
feeling, like I might make it there one day.
Just give me something, that I can hold onto;
something harder to see through than a whisper
of that voice in the back of my mind that says
Maybe.
Maybe i'll make it.


My friend Nichole has her skype message as "Just give me one thing that isn't see through". I have no idea what it means or where she got it, but I took it to this place. Soo, thanks Nichole / wherever she got it from. Hopefully it's not a quote from her awesome writer boyfriend. That would be awkward O_o
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WritingObsessed Featured By Owner Jul 8, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
This is really nice. It has kind of a simple message that many have written about before, so it surprised me when I found how unique it was. I really like it, it has a charm to it. Especially those last few lines. :)
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BloodshotInk Featured By Owner Jul 12, 2013
Grins, yay! Thank you so much!! I am thrilled you enjoyed this.
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Wolfmoon35 Featured By Owner Mar 21, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
I love how wistful and whimsical this poem is. I could feel and relate to the deep longing for wishes and dreams to become reality and not just fantasy or fantasies. Beautifully well done. I hope that you, and everyone for that matter, will not just "make it" but also enjoy and cherish the road to get "there." Or at least somewhere while "living in the here and now"... :)
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minninnewah Featured By Owner Mar 19, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Love the concept and what you did with it! Such great imagery
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GeorgiaTh Featured By Owner Mar 19, 2013  Student Traditional Artist
wow i loved it
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Anzelya Featured By Owner Mar 19, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
So many comments :) I guess you really nailed this one!
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lodfile Featured By Owner Mar 19, 2013
Love this!
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BloodshotInk Featured By Owner Mar 22, 2013
<3 I'm so glad!
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lilfixit Featured By Owner Mar 19, 2013  Hobbyist Photographer
I was going to say make the maybe a yes. Then I realized that's what the poem is about.
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BloodshotInk Featured By Owner Mar 22, 2013
:] Thank you <3
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