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My body is the earth;
See how under this bruise
A seed of malcontent sleeps.
See what grows out of each pore
As the pain pours over again.
There is rust in my fingerbeds
That poisons the roots
Of all good that hopes to grow here.
I am the convulsing, revolution
of the convoluted Earth...
I am the tectonic blades that clash
and shout when I curl up and hide.
You will feel me when I tremble,
and fear me when I explode
for under the magmanimous skin
There burns a core of hate
That can't be marred by human hand.
Just some thoughts again... I don't hate anyone or anything in particular (aside from the obvious :P) but today I feel churny and raw.

Another new word for my O'Driscoll Dictionary! Todays word is

magmanimous; magnanimous with characteristics of underlying churning emotion (such as magma under the earths crust)
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SaniriMarrone Featured By Owner May 6, 2013
I am definitely going to confuse this new word with magnanimous, which means chivalrous, generously forgiving, unselfish, etc.
Actually, that might make for an interesting effect, using one to suggest the other... Emily Dickinson does that in at least a few of her poems that I've read-- "plashless as they swim" being one example. She was talking about butterflies/moths and either disturbing nature by accident, or whether or not there's an afterlife, or both. I have no idea what "plashless" means, but I know it wasn't a typo.
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BloodshotInk Featured By Owner May 14, 2013
:giggle: Yes, I make up words a lot. Someone has to!
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lombregrise Featured By Owner Feb 2, 2013  Professional Writer
This piece is feat here / Cette pièce est invitée ici : [link] :rose:
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BloodshotInk Featured By Owner Feb 8, 2013
You spoil me!
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lombregrise Featured By Owner Feb 8, 2013  Professional Writer
:D
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Aurora9912 Featured By Owner Feb 2, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
I am not sure whether to be thrilled or worried about the fact that I can now, for some reason, figure out the O'Driscoll dictionary word meanings as I read them, as if they are already true. ;-)
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BloodshotInk Featured By Owner Feb 2, 2013
Haha well that's a great sign for me! Shakespeare often merged words or changed the meaning of them in his plays and no one was there to explain to the audience, they just were accepted as successful words or not based on the context info they got with the new use. That's what I aim for, f you don't know exactly what it means it should be semblant of a thought or feeling enough that you don't pause to wonder about it.
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0hgravity Featured By Owner Feb 1, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
You will feel me when I tremble,
and fear me when I explode
for under the magmanimous skin
There burns a core of hate
That can't be marred by human hand.


--loved this bit

and the opening lines.
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BloodshotInk Featured By Owner Feb 1, 2013
Thank you. I'm definately not sure about marred though!
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0hgravity Featured By Owner Feb 1, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
welcome
hmmm, what exactly were you trying to say with 'marred', hurt?
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BloodshotInk Featured By Owner Feb 3, 2013
No, I think it made a point that detracted from it. :[
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0hgravity Featured By Owner Feb 3, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
detracted from the meaning of the poem?
I suppose I'm not entirely sure what was meant by marred, I took it more as
no one can remedy the hate or change it :shrug:
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BloodshotInk Featured By Owner Feb 8, 2013
I dont knowwwwwwwww. :[
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0hgravity Featured By Owner Feb 9, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
:/
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WinterLeave Featured By Owner Jan 30, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
I hope you will feel better soon!
very deeply and pretty written <3
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BloodshotInk Featured By Owner Feb 1, 2013
:) Thank you! I feel a bit better each day.
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WinterLeave Featured By Owner Feb 2, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
you're welcome! I'm very glad to hear that!:)
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lombregrise Featured By Owner Jan 29, 2013  Professional Writer
sounds wonderful. Il love 'magmanimous' !
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BloodshotInk Featured By Owner Feb 1, 2013
me too! Thanks haha :D
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lombregrise Featured By Owner Feb 1, 2013  Professional Writer
*Maaaaaagnanimouuuuuuus*

(Zeus' voice)
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BloodshotInk Featured By Owner Feb 1, 2013
woooooah! hahahah
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lombregrise Featured By Owner Feb 1, 2013  Professional Writer
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nightshade-keyblade Featured By Owner Jan 29, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Somehow, these lines remind me of shale gas. Or what the planet would feel about it:

"...I am the tectonic blades that clash
and shout when I curl up and hide.
You will feel me when I tremble,
and fear me when I explode
for under the magmanimous skin
There burns a core of hate
That can't be marred by human hand."
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BloodshotInk Featured By Owner Feb 1, 2013
Nods. I originally had something like 'touched' instead of marred... marred felt better, closer, but its not right still. It's not what I meant to achieve. I will work on the last line and get back to you.
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nightshade-keyblade Featured By Owner Feb 1, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Oh, I see. Well, happy editing. You did well in making it have impact :)
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BloodshotInk Featured By Owner Feb 3, 2013
Thank you! :)
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Zevais Featured By Owner Jan 29, 2013  Hobbyist
I am one with the land.
Feel the air as my breathe burns,
a mist rises in the kingdom.
You beware of my jagged rocks,
fangs ready to tear through skin.
There is a fire within.
It warms these springs.
You come to me to rest and relax.
I am to boil you alive,
perspiration, hyperthermia.
I am the raging river,
and I roar against the cliffs.
You will fear me when I am weak,
for famine shall ravage your home.
You will suffer when you strike me.
You live upon a dragon bound and leashed.
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BloodshotInk Featured By Owner Feb 1, 2013
hyperthermia ~ love.
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Zevais Featured By Owner Feb 1, 2013  Hobbyist
Love can indeed burn you from the inside out. It is just a matter of finding a person that can cool you to the touch.
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FoxofEbony Featured By Owner Jan 29, 2013
Such vivid imagery :)
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BloodshotInk Featured By Owner Feb 1, 2013
:) Thank you!
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KuraiTenshiV Featured By Owner Jan 29, 2013  Hobbyist
Its very good, i have the churning feeling alot. but i have issues so lol
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BloodshotInk Featured By Owner Feb 1, 2013
Me too, but usually I can squash them down and ignore them. you know?
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KuraiTenshiV Featured By Owner Feb 1, 2013  Hobbyist
I do understand, its just hard sometimes. when all you wanna do is scream at the world
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BloodshotInk Featured By Owner Feb 3, 2013
nods
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KuraiTenshiV Featured By Owner Feb 3, 2013  Hobbyist
sorry, i dont mean to push my issues onto you. Your plate seems full as is =)
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BloodshotInk Featured By Owner Feb 3, 2013
dont be sorry, usually a short answer means i know how you feel but dont have any useful advice
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KuraiTenshiV Featured By Owner Feb 3, 2013  Hobbyist
=), I wasnt meaning short answers. sometimes a short answer can be more meaningful than a long drawn out one. but i notice things, and sometimes you seem a bit overwhelmed. I dont mean....intend... idk i dont want to add to it i guess but that still doesnt quite sound right
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BloodshotInk Featured By Owner Feb 3, 2013
If im overwhelmed then ill reply as soon as i can, but dont worry about sharing with me. I care about you
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Talia-WolfFang Featured By Owner Jan 29, 2013
Again, your metaphors fit so PERFECTLY. This one was very descriptive, and gave the reader a very visual feel of the scene. I really liked how this line sounded:
There is rust in my fingerbeds
That poisons the roots
Of all good that hopes to grow here.
Just amazing. Amazing work.
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BloodshotInk Featured By Owner Feb 1, 2013
Thank you so much Talia. Gosh, I'm so so so so so glad I met you here!
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iamPoetry Featured By Owner Jan 29, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Enjoyable read throughout. I do believe there should be some question marks at the beginning unless that is the effect you want.
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BloodshotInk Featured By Owner Jan 29, 2013
After the See's ? No, its like 'Watch'. See how I x y z. ?
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iamPoetry Featured By Owner Jan 29, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Oh yeah, I get it. =D
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BloodshotInk Featured By Owner Jan 29, 2013
:phew:!
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