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I want my silver back,
I need to melt it down and forge a new connection
With someone else.
I want all the precious bits of myself
that I so willingly quarried for you.
I want my silver back.
Weird title huh? It comes from the phrase "Always the silver, never the gold" if that helps.


The really sad thing about this poem is that it's totally untrue.
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kiki1690 Featured By Owner Jul 7, 2013  Student Writer
Very nice!
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BloodshotInk Featured By Owner Jul 8, 2013
Thanks!!
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BUNNEHS111 Featured By Owner Jul 7, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
My English is not really good enough to leave a critique, but I still would like to say something.

I really like how you use sliver and gold. It's quite clever. I will try to explain this as best as I can in English, but basically even if I gave something precious to someone I ended up hating, I still wouldn't want it back, because that leaves space for new things, better things, like a dandelion growing in the quarry. :) I dunno if that made sense, but I'd rather have a few small dandelions than old silver (Unless it's literal silver and dandelions. MUHNEHS! YESH!)
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BloodshotInk Featured By Owner Jul 8, 2013
:tighthug: you are so kind. Thank you so much!! <3
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Athazagoraphobias Featured By Owner Mar 9, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
This is quite a beautiful concept. I really like your use silver and gold here. :)

I'd like my silver back, but at the same time I don't. Those pieces of myself I've shared with others were given in love. I'd rather not tarnish that with hate, especially for something I can never take back.
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BloodshotInk Featured By Owner Mar 10, 2013
Some people didn't deserve it in the first place though
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Athazagoraphobias Featured By Owner Mar 10, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
That's the worst part. You can't always tell... or if you can, you choose to ignore it. :(
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Thisntme Featured By Owner Feb 28, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
This poem strikes true for me, but I will admit: being part of the Common-wealth does have its benefits :D!
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BloodshotInk Featured By Owner Feb 28, 2013
:giggle:
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Story-of-a-Mind Featured By Owner Feb 21, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I love this. Recollecting your pieces from a broken connection to form them into something new.
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BloodshotInk Featured By Owner Feb 21, 2013
Nods, I wish it were that easy!
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Story-of-a-Mind Featured By Owner Feb 24, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I guess easy things won't make us grow ;)
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WinterLeave Featured By Owner Feb 14, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
I know that some day you will give all your preciousness to someone, but you'll never lose it!
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BloodshotInk Featured By Owner Feb 14, 2013
I hope so!
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WinterLeave Featured By Owner Feb 14, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
very pretty!
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BloodshotInk Featured By Owner Feb 14, 2013
yay! Thank you!
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WinterLeave Featured By Owner Feb 15, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
you're welcome!
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donutmonk Featured By Owner Feb 13, 2013  Hobbyist
You are far more elegant with your words than I. Why, if it were meeee writing this, it would have ended with "Bitch where my shiny at. >8C"
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BloodshotInk Featured By Owner Feb 14, 2013
:blush: hahaha, I kinda like that.
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donutmonk Featured By Owner Feb 14, 2013  Hobbyist
Lookit me, I could be an inspiration.
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BloodshotInk Featured By Owner Feb 16, 2013
:giggle:!
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fantasylover103 Featured By Owner Feb 13, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I like silver!!! And this poem!! :D
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BloodshotInk Featured By Owner Feb 14, 2013
haha silver is my favourite colour! Thanks :>
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fantasylover103 Featured By Owner Feb 14, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Oh no problem! :3 :iconsilverplz:
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Zevais Featured By Owner Feb 13, 2013  Hobbyist
You need your iron ore taken,
You don't want this solid wall and old bonds broken
without anyone passed.
You don't need all the parts of yourself you threw away
that you regrettably opened up to the world.
You need your iron ore taken.

Always Everything's Rusted.
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BloodshotInk Featured By Owner Feb 14, 2013
Interesting!
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exquisiteoath Featured By Owner Feb 13, 2013  Student General Artist
While it may not be true, hopefully this stage will come; and then the next stage after that.
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BloodshotInk Featured By Owner Feb 15, 2013
I hope so too
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exquisiteoath Featured By Owner Feb 16, 2013  Student General Artist
:hug:
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Svartulf Featured By Owner Feb 13, 2013   General Artist
Beautiful piece. Likening the beautiful parts of yourself to silver was cool. Wanting to smelt it back into pure form to reforge it was also cool. I can understand and appreciate these metaphors. Well done.
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BloodshotInk Featured By Owner Feb 15, 2013
Smiles, thank you, I'm so glad you understood this all
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OuroborosRagnarok Featured By Owner Feb 13, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I like the concept, the implication that with the person this is addressed to, you couldn't quite live up to what you wanted to give them. Couldn't give them "the gold" so you gave them silver.
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BloodshotInk Featured By Owner Feb 15, 2013
Nods sadly.
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OuroborosRagnarok Featured By Owner Feb 15, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Ah, well. c'est la vie.
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BloodshotInk Featured By Owner Feb 16, 2013
:tighthug:!
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OuroborosRagnarok Featured By Owner Feb 16, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
:D
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