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I want my silver back,
I need to melt it down and forge a new connection
With someone else.
I want all the precious bits of myself
that I so willingly quarried for you.
I want my silver back.
Weird title huh? It comes from the phrase "Always the silver, never the gold" if that helps.


The really sad thing about this poem is that it's totally untrue.
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kiki1690 Featured By Owner Jul 7, 2013  Student Writer
Very nice!
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BloodshotInk Featured By Owner Jul 8, 2013
Thanks!!
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BUNNEHS111 Featured By Owner Jul 7, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
My English is not really good enough to leave a critique, but I still would like to say something.

I really like how you use sliver and gold. It's quite clever. I will try to explain this as best as I can in English, but basically even if I gave something precious to someone I ended up hating, I still wouldn't want it back, because that leaves space for new things, better things, like a dandelion growing in the quarry. :) I dunno if that made sense, but I'd rather have a few small dandelions than old silver (Unless it's literal silver and dandelions. MUHNEHS! YESH!)
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BloodshotInk Featured By Owner Jul 8, 2013
:tighthug: you are so kind. Thank you so much!! <3
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Athazagoraphobias Featured By Owner Mar 9, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
This is quite a beautiful concept. I really like your use silver and gold here. :)

I'd like my silver back, but at the same time I don't. Those pieces of myself I've shared with others were given in love. I'd rather not tarnish that with hate, especially for something I can never take back.
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BloodshotInk Featured By Owner Mar 10, 2013
Some people didn't deserve it in the first place though
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Athazagoraphobias Featured By Owner Mar 10, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
That's the worst part. You can't always tell... or if you can, you choose to ignore it. :(
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Thisntme Featured By Owner Feb 28, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
This poem strikes true for me, but I will admit: being part of the Common-wealth does have its benefits :D!
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BloodshotInk Featured By Owner Feb 28, 2013
:giggle:
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Story-of-a-Mind Featured By Owner Feb 21, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I love this. Recollecting your pieces from a broken connection to form them into something new.
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