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Pinecones are the skeletons of foetal trees.
They are the hopes, desires and dreams of a forest
reduced to the brittle, breakable bones under it all.
They are the unburied memories of loss.
Today, I feel fragile.
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These metaphors are beautiful... It showcases your ability to tie so many feelings into such a tight stanza. Gives the reader an almost tangible, but still so ethereal image. Just... beautiful.
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Thank you so much. I often write very short works, people confuse brevity with simplicity sometimes. I'm really glad you liked this!
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astrangeallure Jan 21, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Superb...really...very visual and thought provoking...:heart:
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Thank you marni, I am so glad you liked this
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astrangeallure Jan 27, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Oh, yeah, loved it...made me see pinecones differently!! And also think, now why don't I think like that????? :D Very welcome. :heart:
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:giggle: No one thinks like me, I am broken
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astrangeallure Jan 27, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Or! Maybe everyone else is broken, eh??? :laughing: :heart:
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Story-of-a-Mind Jan 21, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I find this one fascinating. I feel I can not fully untangle it, but then that is the fascinating part. Each time I look at it, it tells me something else. One time I focus on the pinecones as hopes, desires and dreams and the promise of future live, next time on the skeletons (in my closet) the unburied memories and again the next time on the brittle breakable bones, the vulnerability. Great work!

I also liked how the twisted mirror form Zervais interacts with your poem.
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For me, it is just as simple as I wrote it. The pinecones ARE the hopes of the forest. They seem dead and isolated, unwanted...

Every year we go to where my sisters ashes were scattered and that involves walking through a beautiful thick wood (like a forest :P) and then up the side of the cliff. When I was little I used to take primroses (the number of primroses would match how old she would have been that day) from under one of the two cherry trees in our garden. Our parents said they were symbols of us, because we had both been ill as children. So i would take the primroses and put them like a tiny bouquet under the tree at the top of a cliff where her ashes were... like a funeral rite.... and along the way through that wood I would collect three small pinecones. To symbolise the three children (her, me and our other sister). I dont know why, it just seemed so important....It seemed so important...
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Story-of-a-Mind Jan 27, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I think rituals are often underestimated because they often seem so 'illogical'. I think rituals can really help us to fell better. So if that beautiful ritual helped you, keep it.
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