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Pinecones are the skeletons of foetal trees.
They are the hopes, desires and dreams of a forest
reduced to the brittle, breakable bones under it all.
They are the unburied memories of loss.
Today, I feel fragile.
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Talia-WolfFang Featured By Owner Jan 27, 2013
These metaphors are beautiful... It showcases your ability to tie so many feelings into such a tight stanza. Gives the reader an almost tangible, but still so ethereal image. Just... beautiful.
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BloodshotInk Featured By Owner Jan 27, 2013
Thank you so much. I often write very short works, people confuse brevity with simplicity sometimes. I'm really glad you liked this!
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astrangeallure Featured By Owner Jan 21, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Superb...really...very visual and thought provoking...:heart:
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BloodshotInk Featured By Owner Jan 27, 2013
Thank you marni, I am so glad you liked this
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astrangeallure Featured By Owner Jan 27, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Oh, yeah, loved it...made me see pinecones differently!! And also think, now why don't I think like that????? :D Very welcome. :heart:
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BloodshotInk Featured By Owner Jan 27, 2013
:giggle: No one thinks like me, I am broken
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astrangeallure Featured By Owner Jan 27, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Or! Maybe everyone else is broken, eh??? :laughing: :heart:
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Story-of-a-Mind Featured By Owner Jan 21, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I find this one fascinating. I feel I can not fully untangle it, but then that is the fascinating part. Each time I look at it, it tells me something else. One time I focus on the pinecones as hopes, desires and dreams and the promise of future live, next time on the skeletons (in my closet) the unburied memories and again the next time on the brittle breakable bones, the vulnerability. Great work!

I also liked how the twisted mirror form Zervais interacts with your poem.
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BloodshotInk Featured By Owner Jan 27, 2013
For me, it is just as simple as I wrote it. The pinecones ARE the hopes of the forest. They seem dead and isolated, unwanted...

Every year we go to where my sisters ashes were scattered and that involves walking through a beautiful thick wood (like a forest :P) and then up the side of the cliff. When I was little I used to take primroses (the number of primroses would match how old she would have been that day) from under one of the two cherry trees in our garden. Our parents said they were symbols of us, because we had both been ill as children. So i would take the primroses and put them like a tiny bouquet under the tree at the top of a cliff where her ashes were... like a funeral rite.... and along the way through that wood I would collect three small pinecones. To symbolise the three children (her, me and our other sister). I dont know why, it just seemed so important....It seemed so important...
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Story-of-a-Mind Featured By Owner Jan 27, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I think rituals are often underestimated because they often seem so 'illogical'. I think rituals can really help us to fell better. So if that beautiful ritual helped you, keep it.
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BloodshotInk Featured By Owner Feb 1, 2013
Nods
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lombregrise Featured By Owner Jan 21, 2013  Professional Writer
You're in the features of the week [link] :clap:
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BloodshotInk Featured By Owner Jan 27, 2013
Gosh Thank you!
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FireWolf2012 Featured By Owner Jan 20, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
This is brilliant! I just absolutely loved it! It made feel kind of sad as well... :)
Great work!
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BloodshotInk Featured By Owner Jan 20, 2013
Thank you! I felt sad when I wrote it!
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FoxofEbony Featured By Owner Jan 17, 2013
This is beautiful I love the idea that every tree is a different hope or dream of the forest and the fact they are broken makes me think of the forest being in someone's imagination and marking all the things they've wanted in life but never managed to achieve
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BloodshotInk Featured By Owner Jan 20, 2013
Nods, thank you Fox.

For me pinecones are really personal. As a child once a year we would walk through a wood and then up the side of a cliff to where my sisters ashes were scattered. In the wood I would collect three pinecones, as symbols of myself and my two sisters. I dont quite know why, now, but I remember it feeling important. They have always been related to sorrow and always seemed very sad objects to me. Discarded. Unwanted. Alone.
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FoxofEbony Featured By Owner Jan 20, 2013
That's so sad and beutiful at the same time :(
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0hgravity Featured By Owner Jan 16, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
oh god.

I love this one.

so ridiculously much.
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BloodshotInk Featured By Owner Jan 20, 2013
:) Thank you! You know your opinion means the world to me!
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0hgravity Featured By Owner Jan 20, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
:D
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Zevais Featured By Owner Jan 16, 2013  Hobbyist
Skeletons are the grass of this elephant graveyard.
They are the laughing desires of this hyena pack.
Gnawed to fine, moist meal in their mouths.
They are the decayed cycle of life.
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BloodshotInk Featured By Owner Jan 16, 2013
This reminded me of a brutal version of The Lion King.

Please submit I wish to fave <3
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Zevais Featured By Owner Jan 16, 2013  Hobbyist
My fiance loves the Lion King; it is her favorite movie. I tend to do something related to it here and there.

I'll post it probably tomorrow night then. I just put up a new song, Unbound Unleashed, and a new journal... I like to give a day or two between my writings.

That will give me enough time to figure out how to put links to people's works without deviant art finding a away to make the link glitch... and hopefully with your icon picture working as a link to.
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BloodshotInk Featured By Owner Jan 16, 2013
:giggle:

Well to put the icon as a link you put :iconkathrynodriscoll:

and to put a link try <a href="URL GOES HERE">NAME OF LINK GOES HERE</a> or, of course :devkathrynodriscoll: if its a DA persons profile you wanna link to.
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Zevais Featured By Owner Jan 18, 2013  Hobbyist
I submitted the poem to my gallery.
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BloodshotInk Featured By Owner Jan 18, 2013
Fabulous! Thank you :D
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Zevais Featured By Owner Jan 17, 2013  Hobbyist
You would be surprised how many times that I used those exactly the way they should, and they still glitched and did not work. Deviant art just doesn't like me using codes, lol.

I am rushing to get through my online stuff right now. I had work, than a funeral today, and I am going out with my fiance tonight. I am not sure when I get to posting anything. I still have replies to get to.
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WiNGz69 Featured By Owner Jan 16, 2013  Student Writer
And the new seeds of a yet unborn memory of things to come in the life of a sapling...
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BloodshotInk Featured By Owner Jan 16, 2013
Perhaps
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WiNGz69 Featured By Owner Jan 16, 2013  Student Writer
Pine cones are seeds, after all, and seeds carry new life within. The cycle of destruction and renewal.
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OuroborosRagnarok Featured By Owner Jan 16, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Simple, short, but I feel that that's the point.
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BloodshotInk Featured By Owner Jan 16, 2013
:nod: Right down to the bones of it.
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OuroborosRagnarok Featured By Owner Jan 16, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
:D
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exquisiteoath Featured By Owner Jan 16, 2013  Student General Artist
There's something typographical about Pinecones that the designer in me doesn't love. I'm all for breaking the language though, so I say run with it and ignore me.

I do rather enjoy how much you've distilled into such a tight stanza.
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BloodshotInk Featured By Owner Jan 16, 2013
Well the squiggly red lines of doom tell me I should have written Pine cones, but that seems completely wrong to me visually. Like it is a cone that is pine like, instead of an individual unit Pinecone. but I'm crazy. lol
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exquisiteoath Featured By Owner Jan 16, 2013  Student General Artist
It's a cone derived from a pine, thus pine-cone. However, I see your logic and support it. And as I said (and have just proven) I'm all for breaking the language. It's just that for me visually, it looks less like a compound noun and more like a torpedo. :P
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BloodshotInk Featured By Owner Jan 16, 2013
It's not a cone!
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exquisiteoath Featured By Owner Jan 16, 2013  Student General Artist
No, it's not really a cone at all is it; more like an ovoid.
Pine-Ovoid then?
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BloodshotInk Featured By Owner Jan 16, 2013
:giggle:
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exquisiteoath Featured By Owner Jan 16, 2013  Student General Artist
Glad that's settled then. :P
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BloodshotInk Featured By Owner Jan 16, 2013
:nod: Thank you for your superior shape knowledge.
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lombregrise Featured By Owner Jan 16, 2013  Professional Writer
I love this one
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BloodshotInk Featured By Owner Jan 16, 2013
Grins, yay! Thank you, that made me smile despite a bleak mood.
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