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I speared you with a         black-ink pen.
I tried to balance           the weight
of our weare-worn         shoulders.
Tried to counter         it with beauty
and hopefulness        , with my hopes,
persistence &         with my dark love.
They came to        see it in hundreds,
Droves, of         similarly seeking
hope and         a reason to continue.
Reasons         to love, even when it
hurts.         Reasons to try when the
vast         weight of differences 'tween
us         can't be fixed by adding
a         single strike of strength
        through the middle. Our love
      wasn't strong enough for poetry
     to save. It crumbled to nothing
    but the paper beneath the pen, and
  my half broken voice whispering a
tale of our forgotten, broken, love.
Despite hundreds of you falling in love with 'You will never die', the love died nonetheless.

New word time!

weare-worn: worn down and weary.
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Vagabond24-7 Featured By Owner Jun 3, 2013
I adore the line "out love wasn't strong enough for poetry to save".
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BloodshotInk Featured By Owner Jun 5, 2013
Thank you so much! :D
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Athazagoraphobias Featured By Owner Mar 10, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
The formatting is particularly stunning... in a 'the first cut is the deepest' kind of way.
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BloodshotInk Featured By Owner Mar 22, 2013
blushes, thank you so much. I did think of that song when it was done too. How odd.
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KuraiTenshiV Featured By Owner Mar 2, 2013  Hobbyist
It's great, and sad. It makes me miss people
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BloodshotInk Featured By Owner Mar 5, 2013
:tighthug: me too
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KuraiTenshiV Featured By Owner Mar 10, 2013  Hobbyist
yay hugs =D
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WinterLeave Featured By Owner Feb 27, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
very interesting and pretty, but don't regret love, dear <3 it's not the love that hurts or dies, it are the other things!
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BloodshotInk Featured By Owner Feb 28, 2013
I dont :] :tighthug: I am very very lucky, having lost my sister so young, in that no matter how much a break up, or a loss, hurts I don't regret love in any form.
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WinterLeave Featured By Owner Mar 1, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
I'm so happy to hear that! You're a very kind and strong person :) <3
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