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We cut hearts
into paper to make streams
                         of love.
That was my impression of it.
That you ripped
      off
    the pieces you didn't want
until you got something that was
                          pretty.
It's no wonder
that I can't believe that someone
would think I was paper-perfect,
                         or loved.

             ~♥~♥~
Inspired by the title of one of today's DD's; "paper hearts" so thank you *travelgirlxx!
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cality Featured By Owner Jun 2, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
This is very touching indeed. Lovely imagery, and I really like how the formatting is almost ribbon-like in appearance, echoing the cutting/streams mentioned in the poem. :heart:
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BloodshotInk Featured By Owner Jun 3, 2013
:blush: Thank you so much, I'm glad you like it!
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cality Featured By Owner Jun 8, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
You're most welcome!
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TeaPhotography Featured By Owner Apr 27, 2013  Professional General Artist
What great imagery! :heart:
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exquisiteoath Featured By Owner Mar 24, 2013  Student General Artist
This one I'll get behind 100%, and it captures a couple of themes that run very close to my heart in terms of the way we as people treat each other.
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BloodshotInk Featured By Owner Apr 18, 2013
I'm late responding because April hates me, I apologise :[

:tighthug: Thank you so much. :]
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exquisiteoath Featured By Owner May 11, 2013  Student General Artist
I'm late replying because my life just keeps barreling along.

You're very welcome.
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KuraiTenshiV Featured By Owner Mar 10, 2013  Hobbyist
its pretty i like it =)
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BloodshotInk Featured By Owner Mar 22, 2013
Thanks Kurai!
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KuraiTenshiV Featured By Owner Mar 22, 2013  Hobbyist
Any time =)
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Lazy--kurt Featured By Owner Mar 9, 2013  Student Traditional Artist
Aw, you totally deserve the favs you get. (:
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BloodshotInk Featured By Owner Mar 10, 2013
aw thank you so much :)))
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shehrozeameen Featured By Owner Mar 9, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I love this poem in so many ways, and at so many levels, that, honestly speaking, I want to thank you for posting this poem.

it is about hypocrisy; it is about broken relationships; it is about betrayal; it is about hopelessness; its a reference to "halo"; its an embodiment of the prose piece which had your grandfather in it; the scars of "the wolf" and "the sheep" are brimming out of this work; the carved papers remind me of "the music of razors" (which btw is a big reference - its the first serious book that I read, and the one which left the biggest impact on me).

I personally think you've written something very very well done. Bravo. :)
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BloodshotInk Featured By Owner Mar 10, 2013
Thank you so much. I was pretty upset when you posted this comment and it cheered me up a lot. There is a lot in this poem. Thank you so so much :hug:
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shehrozeameen Featured By Owner Mar 10, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
... I'm sorry if it upset you. But... what's written cannot be undone (but it can be hidden), so... if you felt strongly about it, I'll try to be much more measured in my words.

Again, I'm really sorry about upsetting you.
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BloodshotInk Featured By Owner Mar 10, 2013
Noo not upset BY your comment, upset at the time when you posted it. It made me feel better.
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shehrozeameen Featured By Owner Mar 10, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
oh... alright...

sent you the suggestions... you might (or might not) like them.

in any case. cheers.
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Decoy-Mantis Featured By Owner Mar 8, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
novels
and short
stories
take 2 much time &
effort &
also around the 3rd page
it would become
apparent
i haven't any
talent

luckily,
modern poetry
has it that i can,
without any
knowledge of
prosody,
fire off a poem
in under 10 min
by breaking a few
thoughtless
sentences
up
into
lines
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BloodshotInk Featured By Owner Mar 8, 2013
:thumbsup: Awesome for you.
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WinterLeave Featured By Owner Mar 8, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
beautiful <3 I wish you real love! happy woman's day!
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BloodshotInk Featured By Owner Mar 10, 2013
Thank you :rose: You too!
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WinterLeave Featured By Owner Mar 10, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
you're welcome!
thank you!!!:)
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TaeYoongJoongSa Featured By Owner Mar 7, 2013
I don't know if you're angry about something or what ... but this is how I percieved it: couldn't help but notice you said "ripped off pretty pieces
you didn't want until you got something that was pretty"

you like what you like, and don't like what you don't like ... how you take it is up to you ... and even though sometimes we want others to think
"take all and everything for what it is, and not just pick and choose" ... we know it's not like that all the time.

That's the world we live in ... there's no such thing as complete acceptance. There's always things people don't like, and things we do like

and even within our art and our hearts ... when we draw the pieces, and we look back at some of them ... ya scrap some, ya want some.
Maybe we don't scrap everything ... but there's always the scrap among the many ... everything else is what we put or show out there

and for all art that's shared in the world ... when one artist "takes another from another artist" (hopefully granted with permission to display,
of course in respect to that), NOT SIMPLY MEANING TO TAKE but working on it, I look at it "as a collaboration of sorts ... an extension of
already what's out there"

It's like a DJ ... what they do is the same thing, except it's music.

If it's poetry ... as long as it INSPIRES YOU TO DO YOUR OWN

My perception is that you think everything has to be original ... and I APPRECIATE, AND SOMETIMES BELIEVE IN ORIGINALITY

but my point is whether it's art, music, poetry, film ... what inspires us, take it as a tribute ... and a piece, from one artist to another. As long
as you give credit to another artist for the original picture or piece ... there's no rip off, only an extension or tribute of what it already is
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BloodshotInk Featured By Owner Mar 8, 2013
Crap sorry I'm replying using my phone and it sent my Reply early. As I was saying....

I respect the readers right to get from it whatever they do, but think that your opinion came from misreading that line so I thought I'd point it out.

For me this poem is nothing to do with poetry. It's about the narrator not velieving they are lovable. That they don't fit into the ideals of inner and outer beauty that They think leads to love.

Hope that helps
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TaeYoongJoongSa Featured By Owner Mar 8, 2013
yeah I sorta thought that ... but that one line just sorta irked me a bit

Sorry I took it the wrong way. It's okay now, we're cool
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BloodshotInk Featured By Owner Mar 8, 2013
Hey, thanks for your comment but, in my view at least, I think you got something completely different than what I wrote from this by misreading what I wrote on one line.

You responded to this line; "ripped off pretty pieces you didn't want until you got something that was pretty"

But I wrote;

"That you ripped off the pieces you didn't want until you got something that was pretty.
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TaeYoongJoongSa Featured By Owner Mar 8, 2013
yeah I got a bit upset

sorry 'bout that. it was a misunderstanding
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BloodshotInk Featured By Owner Mar 8, 2013
No worries, normally I let a reader take whatever they like from a poem but I felt you thought less of me because of an opinion you thought I had which I didn't so I thought it was best to explain ^_^ Shiz happens
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TaeYoongJoongSa Featured By Owner Mar 9, 2013
nah, we're cool, should be okay
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Mysteryouz-Black-Cat Featured By Owner Mar 7, 2013
holy crap dude O.O thts AMAZING and deep
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BloodshotInk Featured By Owner Mar 10, 2013
:blush: Thank you! I try :]
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Olivia-Holmes Featured By Owner Mar 7, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Lovely!
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BloodshotInk Featured By Owner Mar 10, 2013
Thanks Olivia!
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Olivia-Holmes Featured By Owner Mar 10, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Very welcome, dearie!
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SquallWilliams Featured By Owner Mar 7, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Good one!
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BloodshotInk Featured By Owner Mar 10, 2013
yay! :D
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YumeNoMinai Featured By Owner Mar 7, 2013   Traditional Artist
Beautiful! ^_^
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BloodshotInk Featured By Owner Mar 10, 2013
Thanks Yume :>
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YumeNoMinai Featured By Owner Mar 10, 2013   Traditional Artist
^_^
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Svartulf Featured By Owner Mar 7, 2013   General Artist
Bravo Kathryn!
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BloodshotInk Featured By Owner Mar 10, 2013
grins, thank you Svartulf :]
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Svartulf Featured By Owner Mar 11, 2013   General Artist
=^.^=
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Zevais Featured By Owner Mar 7, 2013  Hobbyist
I carve thoughts
onto rock to destroy rivers
...of rage.

My impressions were hardly made.
So they grew
...covering
...every part of me
until there was anything left
...untainted.

It's easy to see
that none would ever believe
that a corruption flowed through me
...and rage.
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of-the-skies Featured By Owner Mar 7, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
That is some great poetry.
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Zevais Featured By Owner Mar 8, 2013  Hobbyist
Thank you; it can only be as good as the writing that inspired it. Have a :llama: as a reward for reading it.
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FoxofEbony Featured By Owner Mar 7, 2013
This is beautiful and creates the most amazing imagery :D
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BloodshotInk Featured By Owner Mar 10, 2013
Yay! I try :>
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FoxofEbony Featured By Owner Mar 10, 2013
:hug:
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