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sparrowchild;
lay down
in the vestibule
of bracken and bargaining
and in your swan song
tell me the truth -
why does a sparrowchild
cry?
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:icondisrhythmic:
disrhythmic Featured By Owner Jan 10, 2014
Vestibule of bracken. :heart:
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:icondamagedhomewrecker:
DamagedHomewrecker Featured By Owner Jan 7, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
i just love the simplicity of this, how beautiful it is, the juxtaposition of sparrow/swan. just lovely.
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BloodshotInk Featured By Owner Jan 7, 2014
:tighthug: Oh thank you :]
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PrussianPersephone Featured By Owner Jan 7, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
because the songbirds told her she's not allowed to make any other sounds.
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BloodshotInk Featured By Owner Jan 7, 2014
I know them feels
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Vvlad-vVolfen Featured By Owner Jan 6, 2014  Hobbyist Digital Artist
How will you know it's the truth?

(Perhaps that's why they cry....)
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BloodshotInk Featured By Owner Jan 7, 2014
Thats true
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:iconghostoftheemptygrave:
GhostOfTheEmptyGrave Featured By Owner Jan 5, 2014
It cries because tears are unavoidable sometimes :(
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BloodshotInk Featured By Owner Jan 7, 2014
Nods
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DragonsChest Featured By Owner Jan 5, 2014  Professional Writer
Good poetry and good question... :hug:
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BloodshotInk Featured By Owner Jan 7, 2014
thanks!
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:iconwinterleave:
WinterLeave Featured By Owner Jan 5, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
very pretty!
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BloodshotInk Featured By Owner Jan 7, 2014
thank you!
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:iconwinterleave:
WinterLeave Featured By Owner Jan 8, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
You're welcome!
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HeHasAHeart Featured By Owner Jan 5, 2014
I send out my mournful keening
Each note a nail in my own coffin
For a fool I used to be
Wrapped up in a false sense of security
Thinking I knew all that was, and is, and will be
Until I took the fabled step
The step that painted my ignorance for all to see
The drop that shattered my spirit
and the realization that embedded this tune
This sorrowful funeral march in my now parched throat
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BloodshotInk Featured By Owner Jan 7, 2014
:tears:
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:icondenisecroy:
DeniseCroy Featured By Owner Jan 5, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Because it fell off the nest pushed by the cuckoo-ling. As it so happens in the real world. 
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BloodshotInk Featured By Owner Jan 7, 2014
Nods. Sounds about right.
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cerealnovels Featured By Owner Jan 5, 2014
Lovely and vivid. I really like the word sparrowchild. 
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BloodshotInk Featured By Owner Jan 7, 2014
me too! :giggle: Thanks!
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