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They say a rolling stone gathers no moss,
so when I shudder to a halt
The rocks in my feet continue to grind.
I feel the sand in my lungs
and the regretful mist silting in my heart
as the waves come back in
reaching eagerly for my legs, spooling, churning
over me. Rooted in my misery.
I know the rocks in my feet will help me drown.
Not currently suicidial but very familiar with the feelings and feeling pretty low. Just some poetical thoughts about the brutality of reality. (rhyming not intended)
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minninnewah Mar 19, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Nice little piece... I love this line even though I have no idea what it really means: "The rocks in my feet continue to grind." The last line is cool too.
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I'm late responding because April hates me, I apologise :[

There were a lot of metaphors mixed in to this piece, "between a rock and a hard place", "nose to the grindstone", the "heavy heart" and the idea that people would drown themselves by tying rocks to themselves and jumping in rivers.
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trueshinken Mar 3, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I read on Cracked recently about the 'rolling stone gathers no moss' thing. It was supposed to mean 'so don't roll a stone, because moss is awesome'. Weird, uh?
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trueshinken Mar 3, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Yeah, check it on Cracked.com
It's an article about misquoted proverbs. I'd link it, but Cracked is blocked here at work.
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shehrozeameen Jan 23, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I hope that you're feeling better now.
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Getting there (she said dubiously)
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shehrozeameen Jan 27, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
*offers hands* Kath, my dear dear friend; I don't want you to hit rock bottom. You mean a lot to me, as a friend, as an inspiration, as a person.
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:tighthug: Thank you for this. I have started to function again which is the beginning of recovery I think :] You have really really truly helped me lately. Thank you
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shehrozeameen Feb 1, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
*blush* stay happy... and cheer up...
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