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Foetal
Trying to fold the pain up
To trap it between the paper cut limbs.
Curled up
Protective
But the shockwaves come
Pulsing from inside
Destroying cells
Radiocactive
Curled up
To trap it between the paper cut limbs.
Trying to fold the pain up.
Foetal.
So muhcpain
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Athazagoraphobias Featured By Owner Mar 9, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
This was rather intense. Well-written, to say the least.

I hope the pain has subsided. :)
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BloodshotInk Featured By Owner Mar 10, 2013
It has for today. Thank you :rose:
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Story-of-a-Mind Featured By Owner Feb 21, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I marvel about how you utilized the structure of this poem to trap it between the ink made limbs of reversely repeated lines. And how the shockwave, pulsing form inside, is in fact in the middle, the inside of the poem.
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BloodshotInk Featured By Owner Feb 21, 2013
:tighthug: I marvel at how you see such detail right away! :D
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Story-of-a-Mind Featured By Owner Feb 24, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
:giggle:
:tighthug:
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nightshade-keyblade Featured By Owner Feb 11, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
:rose: The pain we feel brings out words that we can't say
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BloodshotInk Featured By Owner Feb 15, 2013
Nods sadly
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nightshade-keyblade Featured By Owner Feb 15, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
:rose: :heart:
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0hgravity Featured By Owner Feb 7, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
this really gives the sense of being tightly coiled.

and after 'shockwaves' it felt like an explosion on the inside but the energy never escapes it just sort of tightens the coil...

:hug:
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BloodshotInk Featured By Owner Feb 8, 2013
It hurt a lot yesterday
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