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He always told me I was deep.
An unfiltered distillation of a humanitarian ocean.

He accepted me, gills and all -
  He knew that I needed my eccentricities to breathe
         under the seascrapers of pollution
               that hung over my head.
 Or he said he did.

At the end of it all,
he tugged the gills open to expose me;
    my innards trailed across the coral reef
       as I swam trustingly forward, hoping for the best.
 I tried to believe.

I believed him, gills and all -
But eventually, he left me, with holes in my sides
   Where he had spooned out my intestines
      To tether them to a boulder.
 I tried to breathe.

He always told me I was deep.
It must have been a surprise to read:


                                  Death by puddle.
It's the little things.

Full credit to =Deathbypuddle whos name inspired me to write today.


*glossolalias rocks my life <3
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wavesandbreakers88 Jun 27, 2013  Student Writer
Things about this poem I like:
-The irony of the last line.
-The word "seascrapers".
-The way you've expressed the idea that it hurts when people we trust reject our eccentricities; it's not overexplained or anything, just a clear metaphor that's easily understood and identified with.

Nice work! :)
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:D Thank you, and yes, it does hurt. I really appreciate you understanding the meaning behind my work!
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wavesandbreakers88 Jun 27, 2013  Student Writer
You're welcome! It's nice to be understood. :)
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:iconxlntwtch:
Seen here [link] and appreciated. :+fav: Especially that last line.
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:iconbloodshotink:
Aww! Thank you so much!
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You're very welcome.
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dreamsinstatic May 24, 2013  Professional Writer
Your fantastic work has been featured in the 100th edition of Friday Night Features.
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You are too kind :D
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:icondomsaverem:
I love "He knew that I needed my eccentricities to breathe/under the seascrapers of pollution..." Utterly fantastic work Kathryn! :D
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:D Aw! thank you so much! :D
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