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Hear me read it!

It is nebulonic fate that we should dance
together in this burning bald ballroom
as the flames lick up the sepiatic walls
and drip curled paper down upon us.

It is our right to spin each other here
in the torrentous reign of flames and ash
as the chandelier, already hanging,
spits and sparks at us, trying to take us too;

and as everything we ever loved or cherished
in porcelain veneer or hand-crafted sycamore
crumbles to a close, still the thought remains-
that it is our star-writ fate to dance on.
One of my favourite poets, and friends, ~Konjuku posted a fragment of a song on facebook yesterday. He posted the lyric We're slow dancing in a burning room... - to which I immediately replied; And the chandelier spits at us (to his confusion, amusingly). This poem was written thinking about that idea, my gut reaction to one line of a song I've never heard, this beautiful visual in my mind of two people dancing together in a room on fire... and the destruction, but the peace of it, and the resignation and the inner strength that I saw in that image... lead to this.

Kind of a metaphor for using those we love to stay strong when the world falls down around us... kind of a metaphor for accepting your fate. So it's kind of an open ended love poem to those who have helped me get through the past couple of months, it's kind of accepting the relationship that I just got out of's end, and it's kind of just a pretty picture in words. Hope you enjoy.

Three new words today!
nebulonic - with characteristics of nebulas
sepiatic - sepia in colour but also in characteristic. It's hard to explain this one except to say that I said to a dear friend of mine that he is amber and I am sepia. Sepia as a characteristic is kind of, worn down, but potentially still quietly beautiful. who knows.
torrentous like torrential, but more torrenty. I don't quite know, all I can tell you is that torrential didn't quite indicate the forcefulness I wanted it to.

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shep4life Featured By Owner Oct 1, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
this is really cool
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BloodshotInk Featured By Owner Oct 3, 2013
:D yay, thanks, I like this one a lot too!
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shep4life Featured By Owner Oct 15, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
No problem!
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EternalFlame105 Featured By Owner Aug 3, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist

I love this, I'm coming back with a critique later on, but this deserves a wonderful critique and a favorite!!!!!!

Amazing job!!!!

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OrchidWhiskers Featured By Owner May 13, 2013
This has astonishing imagery! I am in awe! Fabulously done :)
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BloodshotInk Featured By Owner May 14, 2013
Aww, thank you Orchid :D
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OrchidWhiskers Featured By Owner May 14, 2013
You are very welcome! :) I love your poetry!
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lombregrise Featured By Owner May 12, 2013  Professional Writer
great lines & reading. I love "nebulonic" :)
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BloodshotInk Featured By Owner May 14, 2013
:D Thank you ! Me too :D
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Mika-Ryoko Featured By Owner May 4, 2013   Writer
Very nice, I absolutely love the imagery
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BloodshotInk Featured By Owner May 14, 2013
:D Thanks Mika!
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Mika-Ryoko Featured By Owner Jun 12, 2013   Writer
You are very welcome ^^
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lupus-astra Featured By Owner Apr 20, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I love this! Ahhh! Your word choice is fantastic, and the imagery of two people dancing their cares away while the rest of the world falls down just really speaks to me.
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0hgravity Featured By Owner Apr 19, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
lovely first stanza.
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haphazardmelody Featured By Owner Apr 17, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
This really does have some gorgeous imagery in it. Gorgeous.
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BloodshotInk Featured By Owner Apr 18, 2013
Smiles, thank you!! So much !
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DeaconStrucktor Featured By Owner Apr 14, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Great imagery. I really could picture the burning ballroom.
I also like the expanded space metaphor suggested by nebulonic, star-writ, and the spinning/dancing, and fire. Like witnessing a universe in its revolutions, with stars winking out like sparks.
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BloodshotInk Featured By Owner Apr 18, 2013
I'm late responding because April hates me, I apologise :[

Thank you!! You are so kind, I love when people notice themes that are hidden inside, it makes me feel like people are enjoying the way I play with words, not just what I'm saying... and I've always been a content over presentation kind of person and so its exciting to get positive responses over something I'm kind of new at
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DeaconStrucktor Featured By Owner Apr 18, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
You're welcome. Your phrasing and neo-logisms are often quite interesting and fit the pieces well. Nebulonic was a particularly good blend of nebula and cyclonic. It played into both the space motif and the swirling dance/firestorm motif very well.:thumbsup::)
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BloodshotInk Featured By Owner Apr 19, 2013
You are too kind :'] Thank you ♥♥♥
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WiNGz69 Featured By Owner Apr 14, 2013  Student Writer
Lovely! And you have such a beautiful voice Kathryn!
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BloodshotInk Featured By Owner Apr 14, 2013
:blush: Thanks Wings!!
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WiNGz69 Featured By Owner Apr 14, 2013  Student Writer
No one really calls me Wings, Chris is fine, and your welcome :). Are you going to be reading more of your poems in the future?
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BloodshotInk Featured By Owner Apr 14, 2013
:giggle: Yeah probably, I've read quite a few. I used to update the list of readings I've done in my journal but I havent posted a proper journal in a while - I havent felt up to it. I might add a box to my profile for the links. In my gallery you can find them easy cos they all say 'Hear me read it!' at the top. haha
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WiNGz69 Featured By Owner Apr 14, 2013  Student Writer
You have the perfect voice and a lovely accent (I'm a yank - that's what you call us over there right?). Anyways I really enjoyed listening. I'll keep my eyes out for more in the future. Well done :)
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BloodshotInk Featured By Owner Apr 14, 2013
laughs, yes that word is used but I have a lot of American friends so I don't really think about it. :giggle: Thanks again :]
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Thisntme Featured By Owner Apr 14, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Every single time I read your poetry, I just get lost in the words. Each time I try to connect the words to a deeper meaning, my attempts fall short.
Great piece, and if not the poem itself, the source of inspiration made me laugh a bit :giggle:.
Love the "Hear Me Read It"s :D! Usually I don't like listening to people read stuff to me, but for some reason, your voice makes me sit back and listen :).
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BloodshotInk Featured By Owner Apr 14, 2013
Aww, I'm so sorry that my meanings aren't clearer. Lately, because of the anniversary of my sisters death, my thoughts are more convoluted and it might be affecting the clarity of my work, but it should pass in a couple of weeks. Other than that, if you don't get it just ask. I love talking about my work :nerd: hahaha
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Thisntme Featured By Owner Apr 14, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I'm reluctant to believe that it's solely because of your current conditions that I am having trouble with them, and more likely that I'm just too damn shallow to understand it =P.
I'll remember to ask if I have any trouble then :D!
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BloodshotInk Featured By Owner Apr 14, 2013
:giggle: Nevah!
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Thisntme Featured By Owner Apr 14, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Well when you put it THAT way... :XD:!
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FoxofEbony Featured By Owner Apr 14, 2013
I love it :) And I must say what wonderful words :D
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BloodshotInk Featured By Owner Apr 14, 2013
:blush: Thank you so much! You are so kind!
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FoxofEbony Featured By Owner Apr 15, 2013
You're welcome :D thank you but you must give credit to yourself as it is your amazing talent as a poet that creates such wonderful pieces in the first place :D
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BloodshotInk Featured By Owner Apr 18, 2013
Silly :blush:
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FoxofEbony Featured By Owner Apr 18, 2013
:D
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fantasylover103 Featured By Owner Apr 14, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Wow. :o
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BloodshotInk Featured By Owner Apr 14, 2013
:blush: Thank you! :tighthug:
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fantasylover103 Featured By Owner Apr 20, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
No problem! :D
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WinterLeave Featured By Owner Apr 14, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
wonderful! very well written!
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BloodshotInk Featured By Owner Apr 14, 2013
:love: Aw! thank you Winter!
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WinterLeave Featured By Owner Apr 15, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
You're welcome!!
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Jigsaw-x Featured By Owner Apr 14, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
this is absolutely gorgeous!!!
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BloodshotInk Featured By Owner Apr 14, 2013
Oh my goodness, thank you! :blush:!
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