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I am crack'd. Open to the pit
with the nub and root exposed.
I am silver pierced and punctured
with holes and protruding pieces
of rocked raw wounds rubbed open.

I am barely shattering my lungs
by inhaling the same air as you
even long after your departure.
With a bile-laced smile I pave
and fill in crack and crevices

I am more than disfigured limbs
and disillusioned heart muscle,
scraping a breath down my trachea.
More than the mess you have made.
I hold in my innards, and survive.
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astrangeallure Featured By Owner Dec 7, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Wonderfully written. :heart:
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BloodshotInk Featured By Owner Dec 8, 2013
Thank you so much!!
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kloe-oki Featured By Owner Sep 2, 2013
Whoa...:iconspeechlessplz:
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BloodshotInk Featured By Owner Sep 3, 2013
Thanks :D
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kloe-oki Featured By Owner Sep 3, 2013
Welcome :)
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SuperFancySquid Featured By Owner Aug 24, 2013  Student General Artist
Your a really good writer :3
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BloodshotInk Featured By Owner Aug 27, 2013
:D Thank you!!
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natyxox Featured By Owner Aug 23, 2013
Original and very detailed! Awesome work :D
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BloodshotInk Featured By Owner Aug 27, 2013
Thank you so much :tighthug:
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DragonsChest Featured By Owner Aug 23, 2013  Professional Writer
Wonderful imagery this invokes...
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BloodshotInk Featured By Owner Aug 27, 2013
:tighthug: Thank you!
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PrussianPersephone Featured By Owner Aug 23, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
"I am more than disfigured limbs
and disillusioned heart muscle,"

Goddamn I love those lines. 

Again, this is extremely strong and eerily amazing.
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BloodshotInk Featured By Owner Aug 27, 2013
:tighthug: Thank you! I love it when you get this excited about my work :D!
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Bahama-dreams Featured By Owner Aug 22, 2013
"scraping a breath down my trachea."
Love that line so much
The last line gave me an image of Hari Kari
That although there is great pain, it's
somewhat self inflected
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BloodshotInk Featured By Owner Aug 27, 2013
:tighthug: Thank you.. I dunno about self inflicted, apart frmo the fact that by being  alive we all subject ourselves to daily pain
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Bahama-dreams Featured By Owner Aug 29, 2013
Indeed we do and where matters of the heart are concerned, we allow ourselves to be put in the position of being hurt hence, the statement of being somewhat self inflicted. Your words always put pictures in my head and that's what came out, hahaha. I'm weird. ...
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scarletwave Featured By Owner Aug 22, 2013
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BloodshotInk Featured By Owner Aug 27, 2013
:tighthug:
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ParkCity Featured By Owner Aug 22, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
eep, dark, somewhat scary, quite frankly! XD but i love the way you put the words
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BloodshotInk Featured By Owner Aug 27, 2013
:giggle: I am dark and scary!
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ParkCity Featured By Owner Aug 27, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
>:) oh really? hmhmhmhmhm i'll put that side of you in mind

jk
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lacesnflowers Featured By Owner Aug 22, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
That's one heck of a poem! Really subjective and strong. I like it!
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BloodshotInk Featured By Owner Aug 27, 2013
:blush: God! Thank you!
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lacesnflowers Featured By Owner Aug 27, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
:clap: You're welcome!
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cskadoz Featured By Owner Aug 22, 2013   General Artist
:jawdrop: whoa, raw open wounds. 
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BloodshotInk Featured By Owner Aug 22, 2013
:blush: Thank you!!
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chromeantennae Featured By Owner Aug 22, 2013  Hobbyist Writer

Wow, emotional. But.......so beautiful. :love:

There's so much beauty in raw emotion, the moment when you see a human in their most vulnerable state, you see the true, unadulterated beauty of that person. Gah........your emotional poetry is just beyond beautiful, Kathryn. Even when the imagery is as stark and impactful as this. Only adds to the beautiful vision. Lovely. :heart:

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BloodshotInk Featured By Owner Aug 22, 2013
:blush: Thank you sweetheart, you are so kind :love: Thank you !
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chromeantennae Featured By Owner Aug 22, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
My pleasure, as always. :tighthug: This was absolutely fantastic. :heart:
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Soultrip69 Featured By Owner Aug 21, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
I like. Very well written.
I sense a darkness inside the words, much like how I tend to write.
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BloodshotInk Featured By Owner Aug 22, 2013
:) Thank you ! Yeah it was a dark time (when I wrote the first draft).
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LightOverpowers58 Featured By Owner Aug 21, 2013  Student Writer
This piece is raw emotion...and the imagery is just Stabbed with a Fork! powerful.

Amazing work, hun!
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BloodshotInk Featured By Owner Aug 22, 2013
:tighthug: THANK YOU. :) It was a raw, rough, time.
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LightOverpowers58 Featured By Owner Aug 22, 2013  Student Writer
No problem, hun....I'm here if you ever want to talk...:glomp:
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Isabellaf28 Featured By Owner Aug 21, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
absolutely beautiful :D
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BloodshotInk Featured By Owner Aug 21, 2013
:love: Thank you!
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cerealnovels Featured By Owner Aug 21, 2013
This one is so strong in emotion and description. Took my breath away.
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BloodshotInk Featured By Owner Aug 21, 2013
:love: Wow what a compliment, thank you so much ! 
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cerealnovels Featured By Owner Aug 23, 2013
You are welcome :) 
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Your poems are getting very visual. And 'bloody'. I like that.
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BloodshotInk Featured By Owner Aug 21, 2013
:giggle: Thank you! These past 2 are based on notes from a darker time, but I finished them off yesterday and today. 
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No problem. It's nice to go back to our old stuff sometimes and find things that never came out to the world.
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Imperial-Radiance Featured By Owner Aug 21, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
You really need to stop making poems that touch my heart so much, like this one. No, wait. Don't stop. You're too good at it. :heart:
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BloodshotInk Featured By Owner Aug 21, 2013
:tighthug: Thank you so much :'] and I wont stop :eager:
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TarosMyr Featured By Owner Aug 21, 2013   Writer
Again, so visceral. Just wonderful- quite literally "spilling your guts". :)
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BloodshotInk Featured By Owner Aug 21, 2013
:love: You are sweet, thank you! :]
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