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Hear me read it

I splashed black ink onto your spine;
unintentional as I frenzied and fawned
to try and catch the elusive thought.

You patiently waited for me to return,
out of breath and triumphant, with my trophy.
We hung it on wood next to the elk.

In my haste to write of the love of you,
I'd written in you. I'd marked you as mine,
as my words intoxicated your weak heart.

The ink had permeated your flesh, your blood,
until it silted, deep inside you,
a permanent, unedited, tattoo of our love.
For RS.
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Given 2013-07-01
Tattoo by `KathrynODriscoll ( Featured by Beccalicious )
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this had a magnificent depth and seems like its strait from a deep thought process it held a lot of meaning for me personally. the originality of this was outstanding as well. very simple outside yet a complex underneath. the words were a bit more complex , and i adored it with the added effect giving this short poem an intelligent feel. the part that had the most meaning (in my experience) was " as my words intoxicated your weak heart" it kind of brought a story deeper into it maybe showing the girl is weaker and she accepts these words of afection because no one else will tell them to her. i encourage you to do more work.
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ThePlaces Aug 15, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Congrats for the DD :) Can you tell me the theme of the poem for me to understand better?
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Love, poetry, writing about someone you love and trying to capture them and how often men fall in love with me writing about them rather than with me specifically
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Congrats on your DD! :)
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Ellen-Souler Jul 1, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
congrats on the DD
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thetaoofchaos Jul 1, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Congrats on the feature! I love the image of the weak heart intoxicated by words. Well done.
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:love: thank you S, you are too kind!
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SerenaVampire734 Jul 1, 2013  Hobbyist Photographer
Wow, really unique imagery, very cool to think about! I'm digging it :D
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yay! Thank you Serena! :D
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