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I want to kill you.

I want our love to be terminal,
And for it to be wrapped
around your heart tight when you die.
I want you to be looking
into my eyes when you do,
And I want you to know
what I have done to you,
                           for you.

I want our love to be terminal,
Or rather; til death do us part.

I meant what I said,
I want our love to last until you die,
Or I die,
Or beyond that.

Or; simply,
I want to spend my life with you.
I wrote this....before.
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ThatFunnierPiece Feb 22, 2013
Oh. Oh. I like the idea. Dark at first, and playful in the end. Peculiar, though I guess things are so.
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Kazul9 Feb 9, 2013   Writer
I'm not very good at commenting on poetry, but I'll give it a go! :)
I love the pacing of this piece, and that dark and violent, yet slightly melancholic tone of it. Beautifully done, as per usual.
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:iconbloodshotink:
Thank you so much, gosh :} I'm so glad you like this!
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Kazul9 Feb 18, 2013   Writer
You're welcome!!! And you know, I don't think there's been a piece of yours I've read that I haven't liked. ^^;
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:iconbloodshotink:
:giggle: Well thank you!
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Kazul9 Feb 20, 2013   Writer
You're welcome! :hug:
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SouixsieQue Feb 8, 2013  Professional Photographer
so f-ing heavy and real!
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:iconpuzzledheartbox:
Love, the illness that makes us endure whatever hardship life can throw our way.
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