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I want to kill you.

I want our love to be terminal,
And for it to be wrapped
around your heart tight when you die.
I want you to be looking
into my eyes when you do,
And I want you to know
what I have done to you,
                           for you.

I want our love to be terminal,
Or rather; til death do us part.

I meant what I said,
I want our love to last until you die,
Or I die,
Or beyond that.

Or; simply,
I want to spend my life with you.
I wrote this....before.
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ThatFunnierPiece Featured By Owner Feb 22, 2013
Oh. Oh. I like the idea. Dark at first, and playful in the end. Peculiar, though I guess things are so.
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BloodshotInk Featured By Owner Feb 23, 2013
I am twisted! :giggle:
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Kazul9 Featured By Owner Feb 9, 2013   Writer
I'm not very good at commenting on poetry, but I'll give it a go! :)
I love the pacing of this piece, and that dark and violent, yet slightly melancholic tone of it. Beautifully done, as per usual.
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BloodshotInk Featured By Owner Feb 15, 2013
Thank you so much, gosh :} I'm so glad you like this!
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Kazul9 Featured By Owner Feb 18, 2013   Writer
You're welcome!!! And you know, I don't think there's been a piece of yours I've read that I haven't liked. ^^;
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BloodshotInk Featured By Owner Feb 19, 2013
:giggle: Well thank you!
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Kazul9 Featured By Owner Feb 20, 2013   Writer
You're welcome! :hug:
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SouixsieQue Featured By Owner Feb 8, 2013  Professional Photographer
so f-ing heavy and real!
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BloodshotInk Featured By Owner Feb 15, 2013
Thank you :>
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PuzzledHeartBox Featured By Owner Feb 7, 2013
Love, the illness that makes us endure whatever hardship life can throw our way.
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BloodshotInk Featured By Owner Feb 8, 2013
Nods and sighs :[
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color-sekai Featured By Owner Feb 7, 2013  Student Digital Artist
i love this! <3
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BloodshotInk Featured By Owner Feb 8, 2013
yay! I'm really glad!
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color-sekai Featured By Owner Feb 8, 2013  Student Digital Artist
:)
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KuraiTenshiV Featured By Owner Feb 6, 2013  Hobbyist
LOVE IT!!!!!!!
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BloodshotInk Featured By Owner Feb 8, 2013
yay!! I like this one too.
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KuraiTenshiV Featured By Owner Feb 10, 2013  Hobbyist
=)
:hug:
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Zevais Featured By Owner Feb 6, 2013  Hobbyist
Breathing life into you.

I created you to love me,
Skin was carefully stitched
around a heart electrified to life.
I don't want to see
the true monster behind my eyes.
I don't want you to know
what I have done
...to create you.

I want you to live for me
or rather, for us to live eternal

I hide the truth,
of loves lost in order to create you
We're alive together,
know nothing more.

And, how difficult,
it was to create you just for me.
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BloodshotInk Featured By Owner Feb 8, 2013
This is sad :{
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Zevais Featured By Owner Feb 8, 2013  Hobbyist
Well, Frankenstein was never a romantic comedy. :laughing:
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BloodshotInk Featured By Owner Feb 14, 2013
maybe it shoulda been, could have been hilarious
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Zevais Featured By Owner Feb 14, 2013  Hobbyist
Well, at least we have Young Frankenstein.
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veronicle Featured By Owner Feb 6, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
It's very interesting.
It kinda shows anger at one who broke your heart but then it shows that you want to be with them before and after death, this is my interpretation of it.
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BloodshotInk Featured By Owner Feb 6, 2013
Interesting! For me this is a straight love poem, like Finding Neverlove and Sweetie Todd, i like trying to make dark concepts into new ways of describing light things like love.

I wrote this before, i guess, i realised that its truly over with him.
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veronicle Featured By Owner Feb 6, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
same here
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theGman0 Featured By Owner Feb 6, 2013  Hobbyist
powerful stuff.
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BloodshotInk Featured By Owner Feb 8, 2013
Thank you!
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FoxofEbony Featured By Owner Feb 6, 2013
I think you have really managed to put love into words and it's beautiful :)
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BloodshotInk Featured By Owner Feb 8, 2013
:) Thank you so much. It was intended to be a love poem and I'm glad you see that! :D
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Moodyhue Featured By Owner Feb 6, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
I think this is very interesting. At first the poem seems very dark, but it ends on a sweet note. Sometimes I think love is this way, because it can be very selfish, but just so wonderful also.
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BloodshotInk Featured By Owner Feb 8, 2013
I like to pervert imagery to be something new. hehe
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Moodyhue Featured By Owner Feb 9, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Good job! XD
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