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We made a deal, you and I.
That I would remain, and you would love me.
It was a compromise
that spoke of sunless days that were still warm.
Of days that would shine
and that would swell with your companionship.

You made a promise, dear,
and I, I was fool enough to keep it for you.
I tucked it tight
beneath the heart that ached for release
from our promises, from life.
I kept our bargain hidden, I kept it kept, for you.

I made a mistake, didn't I?
Forgetting nothing lasts forever, nor no one.
I forgot myself
in my own desire to die, that others do without want.
We made a deal, you and I.
that I would remain, and you would love me.

You broke your promise.
You broke the space under my jailbird heart.
The deal is done
and with no terms to endure, I've rewritten
the history of us.
For if you do not have to keep it, why would I?
The beginning of my 100 Themes challenge. The theme to inspire this poem was Compromise. It reflects my mindset so it's not very cheerful, sorry.

♥ Kathryn O'Driscoll © 2013

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supahSTARZ Featured By Owner Jun 26, 2013  Student Artist
beautiful and sad. Love this!
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BloodshotInk Featured By Owner Jun 27, 2013
Thank you! I'm so glad!
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supahSTARZ Featured By Owner Jul 2, 2013  Student Artist
^u^ You're welcome!
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S-A--K-I Featured By Owner Jun 8, 2013  Professional Digital Artist
Could relate to every line, the feeling and the 'never-ending story' which sadly, and truly, never lasts forever. Wish it could have... :)

Beautifully written. Found this line quite unique "You broke the space under my jailbird heart." :)
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BloodshotInk Featured By Owner Jun 11, 2013
:love: thank you so much
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S-A--K-I Featured By Owner Jun 11, 2013  Professional Digital Artist
:aww: you're welcome
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RuminatingGhost Featured By Owner Jun 5, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Love it, great job!
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BloodshotInk Featured By Owner Jun 5, 2013
Yay!
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nihil-nihil-nihil Featured By Owner Jun 2, 2013
Your writing just kills me.
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BloodshotInk Featured By Owner Jun 3, 2013
:) Thank you!
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KuraiTenshiV Featured By Owner Jun 2, 2013  Hobbyist
I really like this one, makes me sad though, "nothing lasts forever" i want to put it with the last relationships in my life but it feels more Final than that.
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BloodshotInk Featured By Owner Jun 3, 2013
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KuraiTenshiV Featured By Owner Jun 3, 2013  Hobbyist
I did not mean to make you sad face =(
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sherbetblooms Featured By Owner Jun 2, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
:heart: familiar territory...I'm so glad I don't live here any more. I hope you are well :hug:
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BloodshotInk Featured By Owner Jun 3, 2013
:tighthug: I'm surviving, and that's enough. Thanks.
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sherbetblooms Featured By Owner Jun 3, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
:hug:
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rbksc Featured By Owner Jun 1, 2013
This is wonderful. It's a subject that doesn't get enough attention, when someone stays in a relationship after his or her own love for the other has gone, but the potential for heartbreak is still there.
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BloodshotInk Featured By Owner Jun 3, 2013
I'm really glad you enjoyed this! <3
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GhostOfTheEmptyGrave Featured By Owner Jun 1, 2013
This is why I like to be alone. Without friendship nor love, I can never be betrayed.
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BloodshotInk Featured By Owner Jun 1, 2013
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GhostOfTheEmptyGrave Featured By Owner Jun 1, 2013
Sad but true...
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thatwiredkid Featured By Owner Jun 1, 2013
But you also hurt those who truly care about you. Also, you can betray yourself. Without someone to fight for you when even you won't, then there is no point to life. We all need someone to pick us up when we fall, no matter how much we hate to admit it.
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GhostOfTheEmptyGrave Featured By Owner Jun 1, 2013
I know I can betray myself. But, if that happens, it's my fault, my problem. And, when I fall, I rely on myself to get back on my feet. And about those who care... They're so few and we're so used to each other that it doesn't matter.
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thatwiredkid Featured By Owner Jun 1, 2013
I understand how that is, always relying on yourself, never really trusting anybody. But what exactly do you mean by "we're so used to each other that it doesn't matter."?
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GhostOfTheEmptyGrave Featured By Owner Jun 1, 2013
I know how they live and think, they know how I live and think and we never talk about it so we can all get along.
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thatwiredkid Featured By Owner Jun 4, 2013
That kind of sucks :(
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BDancinJones Featured By Owner May 31, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Oh my GOODNESS!! Great rhythm and flow! I've recently found that I just glaze over all the deviations that pop up because they often sound similar or they don't catch my attention away from my own thoughts, but this hooked me and it pulled and eased me through the whole way! This is great work!
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BloodshotInk Featured By Owner Jun 1, 2013
:blush: Gosh! Thank you so much :]
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fantasylover103 Featured By Owner May 31, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
"dies from how beautiful it is"
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BloodshotInk Featured By Owner Jun 1, 2013
:blush: Thanks! :D
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fantasylover103 Featured By Owner Jun 5, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Don't thank me, thank yourself. :meow:
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NekoNekoGirl997 Featured By Owner May 31, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Oh...
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BloodshotInk Featured By Owner Jun 1, 2013
bad or good?
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NekoNekoGirl997 Featured By Owner Jun 1, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Fantastic as always. Just.... Sad. But I can understand why. That only makes it mean more.
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DragonsChest Featured By Owner May 31, 2013  Professional Writer
Sad and full of raw emotion...
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BloodshotInk Featured By Owner Jun 1, 2013
:[ nods
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WinterLeave Featured By Owner May 31, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
it's so pretty!
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BloodshotInk Featured By Owner Jun 1, 2013
:D Yay! Thank you
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WinterLeave Featured By Owner Jun 1, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
you're welcome!
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haphazardmelody Featured By Owner May 31, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
So I got stuck on this line and read it a few times: "I kept our bargain hidden, I kept it kept, for you." It's almost awkward when I read it, but I love it at the same time.

I'm sorry you feel this way, though. :hug:
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BloodshotInk Featured By Owner Jun 1, 2013
:tighthug: Thank you, twice :}
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