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October 21, 2013


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Dug deep into the subcutaneous terrain
beneath the bracken and the basal,
far below where even follicles dare to founder
and where the warmth of keratinocytes
seems but a distant, stale dream in the dark,
beyond that and the sisters of that,
where wood lymphs and fairies pulse
you will find the broadhead of our problems,
stabbed straight through Sweet William;
the remnants of our love.
I wanted this poem to be, at first glance, like the 'remnants of their love' was buried deep in a forrest. But then once you know the meaning of the words you see something else. To get there I had to research some technical terms, here they are:

Subcutaneous (the lowest level of skin)
Basal (base / bottom of a structure or organism, in this case; Skin)
Follicles (hair)
Founder (go down to)
Keratinocytes (90% of the cells in the outermost layer of your skin)
Lymphs (Fluids of the lymphatic system)
Broadhead (arrow tip)
Sweet William (flower, symbolises gallantry in floriography)

As you may now be able to see the visual of the poem now is that there is an arrow (broadhead) buried under her skin, that has 'shot straight through gallantry'. It's about betrayal and the physical and emotional pain of heartbreak.

It is a concept piece, and I think I like how its executed even though I am aware that most people will not get it on the first reading. Sometimes its fun to be weird.

♥ Kathryn O'Driscoll © 2013

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katnisseverdeen4life Featured By Owner Dec 12, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
There are simply no words to say how truthful and wonderful this poem is.
BloodshotInk Featured By Owner Dec 16, 2013
oh thank you!!
AudraMBlackburnsArt Featured By Owner Nov 21, 2013  Professional
Sublime. For some reason, these song lyrics went through my mind as I read and re read:

As we rode out to Fennario
Our captain fell in love with a lady like a dove
And he called her by name pretty Peggy-O

Will you marry me, pretty Peggy-O

If you will marry me, I will set your cities free
And free all the ladies in the area-O 

I would marry you, sweet William-O
I would marry you, but your guineas are too few 
And I fear my mama would be angry-O

What would your mama think, pretty Peggy-O
What would your mama think if she heard my guineas clink 
And saw me marching at the head of my soldiers-O

If ever I return, pretty Peggy-O

If ever I return, all your cities I will burn
Destroy all the ladies in the area-O 

Come stepping down the stairs, pretty Peggy-O
Come stepping down the stairs, combing back your yellow hair
And bid a last farewell to young William-O

Sweet William he is dead, pretty Peggy-O 
Sweet William he is dead, pretty Peggy-O
Sweet William he is dead, and he died for a maid
And he's buried in the Louisiana country-O

As we rode out to Fennario
As we rode out to Fennario
Our captain fell in love with a lady like a dove
And he called her by name pretty Peggy-O

(A traditional ballad played regularly by Jerry Garcia with the Grateful Dead from the early '70s.)

BloodshotInk Featured By Owner Dec 8, 2013
Thank you so much :] I'm so glad you enjoyed this!
Mauijam Featured By Owner Oct 28, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Needed no explanation, for me at least, it is lovely. I really enjoyed the medical terminology. Never thought beautiful poetry could be written with it. Great job! :)
BloodshotInk Featured By Owner Nov 7, 2013
:D yay! Thank you so sossosoos much! :D
RosaryOfSighsx Featured By Owner Oct 25, 2013
I really like "beneath the bracken and the basal"
BloodshotInk Featured By Owner Oct 27, 2013
I love that bit too :giggle: I AM SHAMELESSSSSSSSsss. :D
confidenceAlive Featured By Owner Oct 23, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Neat! I really like the hidden meaning and symbolism, it isn't hard to see you put a lot of thought into this and I can definitely appreciate when a poet will be serious enough to do so (:

(I did have to go back and read it again after seeing the description)
Well done!
BloodshotInk Featured By Owner Oct 27, 2013
:D Thank you so so much! I'm glad the poem works both ways :D
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