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I punched the wall.

The paper broke, a split lipped frown.
That was the thin veneer of joy you painted over my cracks with.

I punched the wall.

The paper bloomed into a paprika tulip.
That was the rusting screw in your jaw swinging off its hinge with your lies.

I punched the wall.

The paint broke into a smile
and I chipped out its teeth. They were the over polished hopes of our future.

I punched the wall.

The plaster spluttered out a storm.
Smooth and sleepy; I scratched at its eyes for promising to look out for me.

I punched the wall.

The plaster coughed hard again.
My anger was a consumption and its tendrils spasmed out from the source.

I punched the wall.

The plaster caved into a hole,
reminding me of all I'd given you and would never get back.

I didn't punch the wall

When the dust settled and its small red brick heart lay exposed, vulnerable, afraid,
I couldn't.

You punched the wall.
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Jojinxed Aug 6, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Gallery this looks great for the lyrics of a song.
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:iconadzokd:
The last line confuses me.
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:iconbloodshotink:
It's a metaphor for a break up. When things start to fall apart but whe nthe other person smashes it to pieces you're still shocked and broken down as a person
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AmysForest May 31, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
This is beautiful, made me want to cry. I'm just getting into poetry and I really aspire to have so much emotion in every word. It flows amazingly, and the repetition then contrast is so powerful. This really touched my heart thank you so much for sharing this with everyone. As I said I really aspire to write like you, it would be an honour for you to read my work *-* just wow :heart: :hug:
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:iconbloodshotink:
:blush: Thank you so much, I am proud of this one. :]
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:iconbloodshotink:
:blush: Thank you so much!
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:iconkillerlord123:
So much symbolism... Amazing.
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