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Nothing is as far away as a minute ago.
No matter how hard you row against the tide
we can never reach it, never return there.

It's hard to sleep in the light of my regrets
that creeps through curtain and barriers
to rot away and bleach all things white.

It's hard to sleep knowing that no distance
is as far away as sixty small seconds ago.
Immalleable, we rot, and things turn white.
Just some thoughts.

New word time:
Immalleable not malleable!
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Athazagoraphobias Featured By Owner Mar 10, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I think this is why time travel is such a popular fantasy. We all want to go back to relive one experience or another, to fix something, to see something, to do something different. :)
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BloodshotInk Featured By Owner Mar 22, 2013
Nods. Definately.
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sherbetblooms Featured By Owner Feb 27, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
The past can certainly haunt! Sometimes it's easier to simply let go...we need to press on, yes! :hug:
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BloodshotInk Featured By Owner Feb 28, 2013
Interesting!
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haphazardmelody Featured By Owner Feb 25, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
So true.
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BloodshotInk Featured By Owner Feb 26, 2013
:> Thank you!
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Zevais Featured By Owner Feb 24, 2013  Hobbyist
Everything is too close a minute from now.
I swim as hard as I can against the current,
its as if I'm standing in place, can't escape it.

It's too easy to rage in the darkness of my thoughts
that claw and tear down at all my walls
that I build as I stand in this black muck.

Its too easy to rage when the time I have left
could be as close as sixty long secongs from now.
Malleable, I'm bending, yielding to the black.
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Konjuku Featured By Owner Feb 24, 2013  Student Writer
Reminds me of a song by Incubus, 11.am.

It goes "The bedsheets cover the heat of choices I've made."

&, about your poem;

What I get is... the pain of pain's passing, not quite grasping time or what you do in it. Loved it.
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BloodshotInk Featured By Owner Feb 24, 2013
:) Thank you! For me it was about missing the past.
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Naganeboshni Featured By Owner Feb 23, 2013  Student Artisan Crafter
time is the essence =D
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BloodshotInk Featured By Owner Feb 24, 2013
Yep.
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lombregrise Featured By Owner Feb 23, 2013  Professional Writer
Immalleable :thumbsup:
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BloodshotInk Featured By Owner Feb 23, 2013
:giggle:
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KuraiTenshiV Featured By Owner Feb 23, 2013  Hobbyist
yeah, nothing is worse than the minute missed
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BloodshotInk Featured By Owner Feb 23, 2013
nods
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KuraiTenshiV Featured By Owner Feb 23, 2013  Hobbyist
::sigh:: any way its very lovely
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BloodshotInk Featured By Owner Feb 23, 2013
Thank you :>
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KuraiTenshiV Featured By Owner Feb 23, 2013  Hobbyist
=D
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FoxofEbony Featured By Owner Feb 23, 2013
This is a beautiful metaphor and a brilliant piece of poetry :D
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BloodshotInk Featured By Owner Feb 23, 2013
Gosh thank you Fox, :huggle:
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FoxofEbony Featured By Owner Feb 23, 2013
You're welcome :D
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glossolalias Featured By Owner Feb 23, 2013
your line breaks and style of meter remind me of seamus heaney's; seamus heaney is my favorite poet.
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BloodshotInk Featured By Owner Feb 23, 2013
wow, thank you! Since I read Act of Union a few months ago it has really inspired me to try and tackle subjects bigger than me, he is so eloquent and clever, so any comparison is a huge compliment :giggle:!
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glossolalias Featured By Owner Feb 23, 2013
x)
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summerday27 Featured By Owner Feb 23, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Ooh, Simply stunning! :faint: :heart:
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BloodshotInk Featured By Owner Feb 23, 2013
gosh thank you!
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summerday27 Featured By Owner Mar 19, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
You're welcome
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WinterLeave Featured By Owner Feb 23, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Beautiful!I hope it gets better soon <3
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BloodshotInk Featured By Owner Feb 23, 2013
:tighthug: Thank you, me too
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HadrianR Featured By Owner Feb 23, 2013
If someone's desperately rowing towards the past, he cannot see his target but only have an idealized image of it in his mind. It would have to be idealized or else why would he want it so badly?

So, perhaps one cannot rush towards the future until he's faced the past for what it is, and has a firm, idealized idea of what that future will hold?

And the rest of us? We drift with the current, oars shipped, and watch the clouds go by. And sometimes a metaphor gets caught in and eddy and chases itself endlessly.
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BloodshotInk Featured By Owner Feb 23, 2013
I'm confused because I was talking about no matter how hard you try you can't go back to the past, not the future. :confused:
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HadrianR Featured By Owner Feb 23, 2013
I took your metaphor and beat it to death with a lead pipe. Sorry.
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BloodshotInk Featured By Owner Feb 23, 2013
haha it's totally okay to take it in a new direction, I just wanted to know if you meant to or if my direction hadnt been clear enough, thats all!
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ithaswhatitisnt Featured By Owner Feb 23, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
It's funny, how just a minute can make such a world of difference. And you never really think about it until a minute happens...and your world tilts sideways.

This is beautiful, and thanks for the new word!! :meow: :hug:
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BloodshotInk Featured By Owner Feb 23, 2013
Nods, and you are welcome! I love making up words hehe
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ithaswhatitisnt Featured By Owner Feb 23, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
:tighthug:
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BloodshotInk Featured By Owner Feb 23, 2013
:tighthug:
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cskadoz Featured By Owner Feb 23, 2013   General Artist
nice. :highfive: mine turn grey; black and white moments blend to bland numbing grey.
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BloodshotInk Featured By Owner Feb 23, 2013
:tighthug:
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