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I am gallbladder and
the rubber taste of my own tongue -
I am a kidney stone,
a heart murmur
and a half digested ball of dust.

I am, in sum,
every part of me
that I couldn't give away
to help someone else.
I was wondering how I would respond to my own question ("Who are you?") - and I figured that who I am is all the things I havent given away already.

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lupus-astra Featured By Owner Jan 7, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
This is so simple but brilliant and I love it.
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BloodshotInk Featured By Owner Jan 7, 2014
Aw! Thank you!
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prettyflour Featured By Owner Jan 1, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
This has been Featured in my journal!   prettyflour.deviantart.com/jou…

:)
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BloodshotInk Featured By Owner Jan 7, 2014
thank you angelface!
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chromeantennae Featured By Owner Dec 26, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
:heart:
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BloodshotInk Featured By Owner Dec 26, 2013
:love:
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DamagedHomewrecker Featured By Owner Dec 24, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
perfection.
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BloodshotInk Featured By Owner Dec 24, 2013
oh thank you :love:!!
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Story-of-a-Mind Featured By Owner Dec 23, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
This is beautiful :heart:

I don't think you stop being those things you gave away - you are still there with everyone you gifted with a precious part of yourself.
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BloodshotInk Featured By Owner Dec 23, 2013
:) I hope so -- -than kyou!
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AskYukiNagato-Chan Featured By Owner Dec 19, 2013
What about receiving? Do I have to be strong in order to find close friendships desired? 
Do I have to ignore pain and do what is contrary in order to find healing?

I don't understand why it is me who needs to give.. Call me self centered or selfish if you like.. But I am the one who needs something.
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TarosMyr Featured By Owner Dec 23, 2013   Writer
:rose:
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CielRulez Featured By Owner Dec 18, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
I really like the idea behind it! I like the idea that you are whatever you haven't given away. But at the same time, I don't think you're a gallbladder...
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BloodshotInk Featured By Owner Dec 23, 2013
:giggle: Well thank you, I think :D
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CielRulez Featured By Owner Dec 24, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
you're welcome :)
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TheCutestBabyNay Featured By Owner Dec 17, 2013
By that logic, you are also the things you have recieved in return.
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BloodshotInk Featured By Owner Dec 17, 2013
Only if I were normal :giggle:
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TheCutestBabyNay Featured By Owner Dec 17, 2013
Since when was normal any fun? :happybounce: 
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Really deep. And sad... But I'm sure you are much more than that :hug:
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BloodshotInk Featured By Owner Dec 23, 2013
:tighthug: Well thank you
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No problem :hug:
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DragonsChest Featured By Owner Dec 17, 2013  Professional Writer
I third the motion, the ending is what hammers it home... :clap:
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BloodshotInk Featured By Owner Dec 17, 2013
oh thank you :blush:
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DragonsChest Featured By Owner Dec 17, 2013  Professional Writer
Very welcome... :dance:
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rlkirkland Featured By Owner Dec 17, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Oh yeah, Joey said it. :)
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BloodshotInk Featured By Owner Dec 17, 2013
:D
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MagicalJoey Featured By Owner Dec 17, 2013   Writer
The ending packed a punch. A hefty punch.
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BloodshotInk Featured By Owner Dec 17, 2013
Oh thank you :tighthug:
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