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dear night-bones
do not marinade in the melanchor
and allow your feeble surfaces
to become slippy and
elusive
under the fingertips of sanity -
don't become a semblance,
a representation
of reality, just be.

there's no need for lavender
to perfumiae the dusk garden
that thoughtless flower
does not grow here.
unobtrusive
after the broken attempts -
of cracked knuckles
as they claw a representation
of beauty, into soil.

oh, to that intrical fluid
sludging through
thinly veined cribbages
of capillary and thought,
illusive,
illusive thought -
don't slumber to a stop
and leave me destitute and dehydrated
of truth, of life.

dear sanity,
do not betray me
with your sharp and unsoft pricks
of the reality
intrusive
into my ribs--
don't sharpen my senses
to the point of self harm by thought,
of thought,

oh bones and sanity
and the screeching owls
that herald in a death-silence
that coos the word;
"reclusive"
do not ask of me more than i can bare -
don't, please, ask me
to endure the blade-in-brain agony
of living.
melanchor. intrical. cribbages. new words all over the joint.
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TheLittlestOwl Featured By Owner Dec 8, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
I adore this :aww:
It's that one line; "the blade-in-brain agony of living" <--- beautiful!

Marvellously written :)
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BloodshotInk Featured By Owner Dec 8, 2013
:D I love that line too :giggle: Thank you so so much!!
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TheLittlestOwl Featured By Owner Dec 9, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
aww :aww: you're welcome :hug:
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shehrozeameen Featured By Owner Nov 6, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I won't go into details, so I'll start with the words themselves:

melanchor: Melancholy and Ardor/Pallor (probably Pallor)
intrical: Intricate and... Medical... it has to do with fluid
cribbage: Cribbing and Cabbage...

So from what I gather... in my opinion... this is about you... but it isn't about you either... Its just an idea of how... thinking about who you might have been or were... you find yourself asking life... to rid of your misery... not by stopping you from living... but by making it not remind you of what made you who you are... That's what I gather... I could be wrong...
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BloodshotInk Featured By Owner Nov 9, 2013
:) Cool! I'm glad you enjoyed it (I think) :giggle:
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shehrozeameen Featured By Owner Nov 9, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I did enjoy it :)

By the way, you on skype?
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Oseltamivir Featured By Owner Nov 4, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Magnificent as always :heart:
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BloodshotInk Featured By Owner Nov 7, 2013
:love: Oh thank you
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haphazardmelody Featured By Owner Nov 3, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
The imagery in this is just gorgeous. I favorited this after having read the first two lines because it's just so good. Love your made-up words here - honestly I couldn't even tell that they were made up, I thought I just hadn't heard of them, until I read your description. And then...I mean, this is just beautiful. Hands down. One of the best things I've ever read.
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BloodshotInk Featured By Owner Nov 9, 2013
:tears: Thank you so much, squeeeeeeeeee. :D!!!!!!!!
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lupus-astra Featured By Owner Nov 2, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
"blade-in-brain agony"
yes.
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BloodshotInk Featured By Owner Nov 7, 2013
:tighthug: Yes.
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Undomiel321 Featured By Owner Nov 1, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Melanchor!!!! I like that word. I want to use it. =)
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BloodshotInk Featured By Owner Nov 7, 2013
Go for it :D :giggle:
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nightshade-keyblade Featured By Owner Oct 31, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
"perfumiae" is that a new word of yours?
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BloodshotInk Featured By Owner Nov 7, 2013
Aye :D
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nightshade-keyblade Featured By Owner Nov 10, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
It sounds very Latin :giggle:
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Beautiful. :)
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BloodshotInk Featured By Owner Nov 7, 2013
:love: Thank you so much! :DD :D
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GhostOfTheEmptyGrave Featured By Owner Nov 8, 2013
You're welcome :)
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UltimateBurrito Featured By Owner Oct 31, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Wow. This is beautifully written, I love it!
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BloodshotInk Featured By Owner Nov 7, 2013
:love: Oh thank you!
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GuinevereToGwen Featured By Owner Oct 31, 2013  Student Writer
Melanchor. I love that word. :) Lovely poem.
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BloodshotInk Featured By Owner Nov 7, 2013
:giggle: Me too :D! Thank you!! <3
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maryjayne530 Featured By Owner Oct 31, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
I like it :)
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BloodshotInk Featured By Owner Nov 7, 2013
Well thank you!! :D
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wallawallaw Featured By Owner Oct 30, 2013
that's what's all about... giving new forms and sounds (i.e. words) to our unnamed emotions, feelings, thoughts and dreams
and thus innovating the language
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BloodshotInk Featured By Owner Nov 7, 2013
:) Thank you, gosh wow, what a compliment.
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wallawallaw Featured By Owner Nov 7, 2013
you're welcome :hug:
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Imperial-Radiance Featured By Owner Oct 30, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
I quite enjoy the creative vocabulary within each one of your poems; this one doesn't disappoint, either. 
I felt like I could easily connect to this poem. I don't know why, and I don't care. All I know is that I love it. :heart:
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BloodshotInk Featured By Owner Nov 7, 2013
:love: THANK YOU. I'm getting hassle about it at Uni and this cheered me up.
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Imperial-Radiance Featured By Owner Nov 7, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
You are welcome. I'm glad that I could make you smile. :)
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Kreistina26 Featured By Owner Oct 30, 2013  Student Traditional Artist
Wonderful piece. I really like the imagery in this. 
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BloodshotInk Featured By Owner Nov 7, 2013
yay! :D I'm really glad, thank you!
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Konjuku Featured By Owner Oct 30, 2013  Student Writer
i just i what marry me plz now
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BloodshotInk Featured By Owner Oct 30, 2013
:giggle: Are you drunk? :tighthug:
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Konjuku Featured By Owner Oct 30, 2013  Student Writer
I'm drinking, but it's too soon for me to be drunk
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BloodshotInk Featured By Owner Oct 30, 2013
you're adorable. I writer-crush you forever. <3
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